Thoughts on Childhood

December 30, 2012
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Sitting on a bench,
Not a comfortable one,
In a public park,
It was not dark.
As I was thinking of invention,
Something caught my attention,
It was a boy,
Quite a small boy,
Playing with joy,
With his toy.

Tears trickled down,
My cheeks, I looked down,
Upon the green ground,
Remembered an old wound.
That wound of emotion,
Stopped all my motion.
Seeing the child play,
Made me sad, this way,
I was not being cruel.
But had been a fool,
Fool in the sense,
Which is quite dense.

I wanna re-live my childhood,
If only be possible, it could!





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Jade.I.Am This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 24, 2013 at 2:49 pm
Haha this was sort of emotional AND playful, to me...I liked it mucho
 
SaphiraBrightscales This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 21, 2013 at 12:03 pm
Aww that's true most of us feel that way....just one tiny thing I'd like to point out... Umm you rhymed "wound" with "ground" I guess, But wound is pronounced as "woo-ound" just check the pronunciation. :D BUt overall lovely poem.
 
UsamaAhmed said...
Apr. 17, 2013 at 12:58 pm
hahah awsum yaar... but i agree with sparkle.
 
Swa.Swara.Vismaya said...
Apr. 14, 2013 at 10:13 am
share the same feeling..wanna live my childhood again...the innocence and carefreeness haunts me still....  
 
AbbaDabbaDoo said...
Apr. 12, 2013 at 7:47 am
Very relatable and beautiful!
 
Fallenoutofgrace said...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 3:07 pm
so cool it is something we all want to re-live :3
 
The_girl_at_her_desk said...
Feb. 15, 2013 at 4:31 am
well said...somethng everyone dreams abt....
 
in.this.moment said...
Feb. 15, 2013 at 12:16 am
<3 
 
Scribbleaway. said...
Jan. 27, 2013 at 11:30 am
Thats so cool. :3
 
baileyanne said...
Jan. 15, 2013 at 2:36 pm
Wow... i got teary eyed!  AWESOME JOB!! :)
 
country-cutey said...
Jan. 12, 2013 at 12:53 pm
again u have great talent but dont force the rhym in so much let it flow
 
MonsterGirl2000 said...
Jan. 11, 2013 at 2:15 pm
i loike it
 
Mr.Poetman said...
Jan. 7, 2013 at 12:27 pm
By reading this i can tell you have great talent, but i dont necesarily like this particular poem, no offence, like i said your vary talented
 
Hamzawaseem said...
Jan. 7, 2013 at 2:03 am
thanks everyone for the comments
 
MysticLady said...
Jan. 6, 2013 at 11:23 pm
Wow!! this totally remined me of my childhood. This is pretty emotional. Good writing though
 
Battle-ColorsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 6, 2013 at 2:29 pm
This poem is good.  It's also true, childhood is a good time.
 
SerenX said...
Jan. 6, 2013 at 6:52 am
I think the idea here was very good, but at a certain point the rhymes became forced. They were there just to make rhyming and didn't help the depth of the poem. This caused your meaning to become a bit obscured. I liked it but it needs some fine tuning. ^^
 
wordweaver1999 said...
Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:53 am
very flowy, but the last two lines could be better
 
B.C.S. said...
Jan. 2, 2013 at 3:51 pm
I like the topic of the poem, but the last line does not really flow all that great, and i would change "wanna" to "want to". it doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. 
 
theatregirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 2, 2013 at 2:29 pm
I like your poem too. I do agree with other commenter. The last line sound forced and awkward. Fix and the poem will be perfect.keep writing ! :)
 
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