Flint and Steel (Alternate Version)

August 25, 2012
By TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace."
-Avenged Sevenfold


Don't deny the feeling within.
Let it burn its way through the skin.

Flint and steel can char to the bone.
Scraping away like pumice stone.
Crystal sounds calling me away.
Voices in my head that want to stay.

Snapped my neck like a mouse in a trap.
A life lived lost calls a bleeding mishap.
Tension tears my soul to shreds.
Rafting a river that's running red.

Murder the light so you can dance with the night.
Embrace the feeling wrought by the venomous bite.
Gouge out your eyes so you can't witness the sight.
Thoughts of love and peace are trite.

Don't deny the feeling within.
Let it burn its way through the skin.

Hold these dying emotions dear.
Melt away with the yesteryear.
Seduce my heart with skeletal lies.
Delving down to where light dies.

A chance of hope is less than real.
Neurotic thoughts are hard to heal.
A hollow shell does not appeal.
Another side effect of flint and steel.

Murder the light so you can dance with the night.
Embrace the feeling wrought by the venomous bite.
Gouge out your eyes so you can't witness the sight.
Thoughts of love and peace are trite.

Wash down the taste of hate.
The hunger of sin won't satiate.
Cauterize my life today.
You cannot speak when there's nothing to say.

A door to darkness draws me in.
Apocalypse will soon begin.
Trying to start a Devil's deal.
Another side effect of flint and steel.

Murder the light so you can dance with the night.
Embrace the feeling wrought by venomous bite.
Gouge out your eyes so you can't witness the sight.
Thoughts of love and peace are trite.

Don't deny the feeling within.
Let it burn its way through the skin.
Life can sometimes seem unreal
When you have a mentality of flint and steel.


The author's comments:
I never said it in the original, but this is meant to describe my ex.

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on Nov. 4 2012 at 8:22 pm
theAquarian GOLD, Wethersfield, Connecticut
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I love how the theme of this is dark, but it's true- it's not 'expected' at all. There's a tone about this that somehow avoids being generic while conveying a topic that a lot of people can relate to. It's disturbing, it's graphic, it's passionate, and all in the best of ways.

on Oct. 15 2012 at 8:54 pm
SoullessHeart PLATINUM, New Hampton, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
Ƹ̴Ӂ̴Ʒ"I hope you make peace with your pain, and never lose your flames."

Wow. this is just plainly amazing!

elizamc83 GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2012 at 3:45 pm
elizamc83 GOLD, Concord, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"From now on, I don't care if my tea leaves spell 'Die, Ron, die,' I'm chucking them in the bin where they belong." -Ron Weasley

amazing work!! I'm usually not much into poetry/song lyrics but these were really captivating and I loved it :) nice job Trace, keep it up!

elizamc83 GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2012 at 3:45 pm
elizamc83 GOLD, Concord, Massachusetts
17 articles 0 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
"From now on, I don't care if my tea leaves spell 'Die, Ron, die,' I'm chucking them in the bin where they belong." -Ron Weasley

amazing work!! I'm usually not much into poetry/song lyrics but these were really captivating and I loved it :) nice job Trace, keep it up!

on Oct. 14 2012 at 6:05 pm
JoyfulCheers SILVER, St. Croix Falls, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
smile at the world and it will smile back

I say this alot but i do really mean, its really good. You have awsome talent to write. Use it well you can. the song/poem has great emotions/meaning with a nice rythem to it. Keep up the good wrok :D

on Sep. 14 2012 at 7:31 pm
jenishma BRONZE, Floral Park, New York
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I guess everyone can drop a comment like Amazing, and Brilliant. And I guess I'm going to have to drop those same comments too. Because this song is absolutely amazing. Obviously, you have talent.   Keep writing. (:

LunaLives GOLD said...
on Sep. 7 2012 at 7:16 pm
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

Flint and steel is the perfect analogy for this poem.  


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