Unknowns (unfinished)

July 9, 2012
By SheetsOfSecrets SILVER, Oklahoma City, Oklahoma
SheetsOfSecrets SILVER, Oklahoma City, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"Never sacrifice what you want, just because someone has a problem with it" - Anonymous
"Nothing is impossible. The word itself says 'I'm possible'" - Anonymous


Running through darkness
I want to break out.
I call your name, and I
scream, and I shout.
I need to see you.
I want you near.
I will hold on
until you disappear.

Tripping and sliding
and falling down,
I reach for your hand, but
you're not around.
Bruises and scratches,
I tend to my wounds.
I carry on
I run through the tombs
of the unknowns.


The author's comments:
Fascinated about my recent trip to Washington, D.C., I decided to start writing a song about an unknown soldier who was abandoned by his fellow comrades on the battlefield. :)

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on Jul. 12 2012 at 9:18 pm
TheLastShadowChaos BRONZE, Hohenwald, Tennessee
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this is REALLY good! keep writing!

on Jul. 12 2012 at 12:18 pm
Bri_Bri_ BRONZE, Archie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
:)

Very deep. You are an excellent writer. :)

justme242 GOLD said...
on Jul. 12 2012 at 12:14 pm
justme242 GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
help will be given to those who ask for it.

it is very good and i love the rhyming 

DanielM SILVER said...
on Jul. 12 2012 at 7:45 am
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

“If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.” – B. Reith

Great job. I liked the message. Great rhyming. Suggestion: expand on these lyrics

on Jul. 12 2012 at 7:44 am
angel_of_silence PLATINUM, Cotulla, Texas
24 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
“The boy never cried again, and he never forgot what he'd learned: that to love is to destroy, and that to be loved is to be the one destroyed.” -Jace Wayland City of Bones

This very nice poem

on Jul. 12 2012 at 7:44 am
hippiechick99 GOLD, Mesquite, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"... How dreary to be somebody-- How public like a frog;
To tell one's name; the livelong June-- To an admiring bog"
-Emily Dickinson

I think this is really great, and you should add a little more. I'm guessing you were already doing that though. What you have so far is beautiful and intriging, I'm looking forward to the rest :)




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