Venomous Bite

Venomous Bite

I know that you're coiled and ready.
Serpentine by your design.
Sap my energy, slow and steady.
You're walking a fine line, you're invading my mind.

You're a soul-sucking serpent feeding on my life.

Sink you're teeth deep inside of me. Let the venom course through my veins.
Cripple my body, and break my spirit. Feel more than triple the pain.
Secrets are few with you. The symptoms start to show.
So get your fangs out of me and give me the antidote.

The storm is sever, and the poison's growing.
Out of the light, and into the blight.
You're clearly sinning, and now it's showing.
It's quite the sight, so try to take a bite.

It seems that your disease is cutting through me like a knife.
You're a soul-sucking siren feeding on my life.

My heart is seizing, and now I can't breathe. The cancer is spreading, and it's too much.
The system has shut down, My spirit leaves me. I quiver and shake at your pestilent touch.
No one suspects a thing. You have me by my throat.
Now get your fangs out of me and give me the antidote.

Your parasitic tendencies are ravaging the world around me.
Regret nothing. Sin for pleasure. Dealing pain out without measure.
Hold on tight to what you have. Your world will soon come crashing down
and I'll be there to watch your end begin.
So try, once again, to sink your teeth in.

It seems the venom is wearing off now. Repairing my structure and renewing my urge to fight.
Slither away, don't you ever come back now. Solemnly spoken are these words tonight.
So long, you're gone for good. I'd say that's all she wrote.
Your fangs do nothing now that I've found my antidote.





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theAquarian said...
Nov. 4, 2012 at 8:40 pm
There are a lot of things I like about this piece. So many of the lines directly clearly make it seem like a song instead of a poem, which is really hard to do- to make that differentiation. I like that it has a story structure as well, you've got this resolution at the end which was sort of pleasant compared to the tone of the song. Any critique lies in simple editing and minor errors like 'sever' instead of 'severe'. That's nothing comapred to the work in its entirety! (:
 
xbrit46x said...
Aug. 8, 2012 at 9:54 pm
this is very well written and i really like it!(:
 
Johnny99 said...
Aug. 8, 2012 at 9:40 pm
All of your songs are simply amazing.
 
ShadowAngel2468 said...
Jul. 26, 2012 at 4:50 am

really quite amazing, on a really high level and iengoyed the vocabulary as much as the passion

pls rate n comment my work

 
DanielM said...
Jun. 12, 2012 at 7:41 pm
I like these lyrics,. their really good. They have a dark eerie feel to it. Great Job!!
 
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