Together Forever

August 21, 2011
By aziiRose97 SILVER, Bronx, New York
aziiRose97 SILVER, Bronx, New York
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Favorite Quote:
You don't understand life until you're done living it - azaliyah

without you
i can't live
you never take you only give
you sit here listening
to my drama and love life
but the only thing i want
is to love you for life
so come here baby and cuddle with me
put a smile on my face
and make me smile with glee

cause baby you all i ever wanted
you are the only thing i need
to bring me up from hell
and back to earth
so it can be just you and me

the words you whisper
kindly into my ear
are the exact words i want to hear
"i love you" are the words escaping your lips
i pull you closer
you grab my hips
then we kiss
and we fill with bliss
now forever we are together
and together we will be forever

The author's comments:
I have never written a song, this is my first. Can you all please comment on how well or bad i did? i really need some constructive criticism

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This article has 2 comments.

surferchick said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 7:43 pm
I think for your first time writing a song, it is great! Keep up the good work!

on Sep. 3 2011 at 6:00 pm
Feeling..Alone SILVER, Bainbridge, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
The words you said, they got to my heart, it's like you threw me away, after you tore me apart.
What's the point of trying when you won't listen to me.
I was all true, while she was all lies, and for you I surrender my heart, so watch as it dies.

Your song is alright, But I didn't find it catchy. Nothing really pulled me in to reading it.

No offence.

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