Alive for the First time

November 22, 2010
By sany.lastflame PLATINUM, Frederick, Colorado
sany.lastflame PLATINUM, Frederick, Colorado
33 articles 16 photos 257 comments

You asked me to borrow my heart,
and gave it back to me broken.
Don't want us to be torn apart,
my words are unspoken.
Under a curse, I'm under a spell.
In another life where I'm not myslef.
Come back to the shadows,
where ever I dwell,
I'll see you,
And I know what I meant when I said

You are every tear that falls from my eyes,
Trapped inside a spiderweb of your lies,
dead inside.
And you are every little thing that makes me smile,
Every moment I wated was worth the while,
Now I breathe,
Alive for the first time.

Destined to keep moving on,
on a path leading nowhere.
Just another game that I lost,
I need you but you dont care.
Can you see what I see,
Can you show me the way?
I got lost in your lies,
Where I seem to fade
You're my light in the darkness,
My cure for disease,
So why didn't you hear me when I said

You are every tear that falls from my eyes,
Trapped inside a spiderweb of your lies,
dead inside.
And you are every little thing that makes me smile,
Every moment I wated was worth the while,
Now I breathe,
Alive for the first time.

For the first time in my life,
I feel the truth can't be told,
Nothing else for me to hold onto,
I see you where ever I go,
But I can't be there, always waiting,
As I feel you fading away...
You asked me to barrow my heart
and gave it back to me shattered
Into a million pieces but I still say

You are my friend when I need one and
You are my answer to the world.

You are every tear that falls from my eyes,
Trapped inside a spiderweb of your lies,
dead inside.
And you are every little thing that makes me smile,
Every moment I wated was worth the while,
Now I breathe,
Alive for the first time.



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on Jan. 4 2011 at 2:22 pm
sany.lastflame PLATINUM, Frederick, Colorado
33 articles 16 photos 257 comments
I know but I just to know what becasue I read it over and over and I couldn't find any errors..

on Jan. 4 2011 at 2:18 pm
CJ_artist BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Do not fear death, for death does not fear you.

grammar isn't just spelling. it's how things are read. there are parts i had to read a few times to get it. like i said though, they're minor. the poem itself is very good

on Dec. 29 2010 at 2:28 pm
sany.lastflame PLATINUM, Frederick, Colorado
33 articles 16 photos 257 comments
That made my day! Thanks!

on Dec. 29 2010 at 12:02 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
11 articles 0 photos 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

Wow! A gorgeous, relatable song. I wish I could hear this song the way you imagined it!

on Dec. 25 2010 at 5:11 pm
sany.lastflame PLATINUM, Frederick, Colorado
33 articles 16 photos 257 comments
What grammar? The only thing was that I misspelled "waiting". What else?

Esperanza GOLD said...
on Dec. 25 2010 at 2:40 pm
Esperanza GOLD, Twinsburg, Ohio
15 articles 0 photos 106 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell me 'sky's the limit' when there are footprints on the moon."

Besides the grammar it's a rele good poem not only did this speak to me but the words flow nicely in a pattern everything runs smoothly 9 out of 10 :D

on Dec. 9 2010 at 6:57 pm
sany.lastflame PLATINUM, Frederick, Colorado
33 articles 16 photos 257 comments
Yes, I noticed that the word that I frequently mispelled was "wated" which was supposed to be "wasted" :) Thanks for the great comments guys :)

SBM706 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 9 2010 at 3:22 pm
SBM706 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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This poem really spoke to me. I loved the lines that you used especially " You are every tear the falls from eyes, Trapped inside a spiderweb of your lies."  Every girl gets hurt by a guy like how you put it in your poem, so most girls can relate. Just watch for some spelling errors because I saw a couple.

on Dec. 9 2010 at 3:04 pm
CJ_artist BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not fear death, for death does not fear you.

i love this, it's really good. needs a few gramatical fixes, but otherwise its really good




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