Eternally Yours,

If Ever You Need Me, Look Around
As Soft as A Whisper, The Sweetest of Sound
My Hand In Yours, We Cannot Be Touched,
My Eyes on Yours, My Heart In Your Clutch.

If Ever You Want Me, Shy Away Not
Fear not My Friend,My Heart You Have Caught
A Lullaby of Whispered Tears,
I'll Kiss Away All Of Your Fears.

For I Am Yours,
And You are Mine,
And So It Will Be,
Till The End of All Time.





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AsIAm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 31, 2010 at 3:22 pm

The good:  This was amazing!  I loved the creative use of capitalization, the rhyming, the voice, and the message.  It felt like someone was whispering right to my heart.  This is true poetry.

The bad:  You used "not" twice in quick succession.  You may not want to change it, I just thought I would mention it. :)

The random:  I don't really read poetry, but I loved this.  And I'm rating it 5 stars because I think it should be top rated, if... (more »)

 
-Missy- said...
Aug. 22, 2010 at 5:16 pm
This is absolutely genius! I loved this poem very much. Good job!
 
Stormythrone said...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 6:03 pm
I really loved this poem! It is amazingly written and you truley get the feeling. Keep writing!
 
BrokenHeartedImagine replied...
Aug. 20, 2010 at 6:07 pm
Thank you! I really appreciate it!
 
little-miss-sunshine said...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 5:09 pm
Definitely an amazing poem! I love it! It's beautiful. That's all I can say.
 
Nikiblue said...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 10:02 am
That was beautiful I loved it. Great job (:
 
KerAnn2011 said...
Jan. 1, 2010 at 10:49 pm
This was very good and moving. :]
 
BrokenHeartedImagine replied...
Jan. 8, 2010 at 8:24 pm
Thanks soo Much :D
 
*Jade* replied...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 10:35 pm
great this my favorite of the week!
 
chocolateharp replied...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 7:53 pm
This is so sweet and well written. I could also see this as the lyrics to a great love song. :)
 
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