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Eternally Yours,

December 5, 2009
By OurLoveIsTrue GOLD, Johnstown, New York
OurLoveIsTrue GOLD, Johnstown, New York
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If Ever You Need Me, Look Around
As Soft as A Whisper, The Sweetest of Sound
My Hand In Yours, We Cannot Be Touched,
My Eyes on Yours, My Heart In Your Clutch.

If Ever You Want Me, Shy Away Not
Fear not My Friend,My Heart You Have Caught
A Lullaby of Whispered Tears,
I'll Kiss Away All Of Your Fears.

For I Am Yours,
And You are Mine,
And So It Will Be,
Till The End of All Time.


The author's comments:
I wrote this for my Dilon <3

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AsIAm PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 3:22 pm
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don't have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I've never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you're also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking." — Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy's Gate)

The good:  This was amazing!  I loved the creative use of capitalization, the rhyming, the voice, and the message.  It felt like someone was whispering right to my heart.  This is true poetry.

The bad:  You used "not" twice in quick succession.  You may not want to change it, I just thought I would mention it. :)

The random:  I don't really read poetry, but I loved this.  And I'm rating it 5 stars because I think it should be top rated, if not published in the magazine.


-Missy- BRONZE said...
on Aug. 22 2010 at 5:16 pm
-Missy- BRONZE, Ahhh, South Dakota
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This is absolutely genius! I loved this poem very much. Good job!

on Aug. 20 2010 at 6:07 pm
OurLoveIsTrue GOLD, Johnstown, New York
13 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thank you! I really appreciate it!

on Aug. 20 2010 at 6:03 pm
Stormythrone BRONZE, Anchorage, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing is good or bad. Its thinking that makes it so. -Benjamin Franklin

I really loved this poem! It is amazingly written and you truley get the feeling. Keep writing!

on Mar. 3 2010 at 5:09 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

Definitely an amazing poem! I love it! It's beautiful. That's all I can say.

on Feb. 28 2010 at 10:02 am
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."

That was beautiful I loved it. Great job (:

on Feb. 26 2010 at 7:53 pm
chocolateharp SILVER, Plaistow, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Dear God," she prayed, "let me be something every minute of every hour of my life. Let me be gay; let me be sad. Let me be cold; let me be warm. Let me be hungry...have too much to eat. Let me be ragged or well dressed. Let me be sincere - be deceitful. Let me be truthful; let me be a liar. Let me be honorable and let me sin. Only let me be something every blessed minute. And when I sleep, let me dream all the time so that not one little piece of living is ever lost." - Betty Smith (A Tree Grows in Brooklyn)

This is so sweet and well written. I could also see this as the lyrics to a great love song. :)

*Jade* said...
on Feb. 19 2010 at 10:35 pm
great this my favorite of the week!

on Jan. 8 2010 at 8:24 pm
OurLoveIsTrue GOLD, Johnstown, New York
13 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thanks soo Much :D

KerAnn2011 said...
on Jan. 1 2010 at 10:49 pm
This was very good and moving. :]