The Tears of Dawn

September 21, 2009
By Paul_James PLATINUM, Plainsboro, New Jersey
Paul_James PLATINUM, Plainsboro, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only true love I ever knew
Was behind those downcast eyes
The only comfort I ever felt
Was during those long hours of loneliness
When I felt for you
I do believe
Only innocence can save the world..." -Ocean Soul


Angel-born smiles slip away
To forever sleep in grace,
Leave names to love forever, but what's in a name,
When farewell is too much to say
Through the tears falling from the face
Of those who will forever cherish the days

Please sleep in peace,
As your dreambound voice will sing the melody
Unfit for tears, not for love, not for me…
Sweeter the dreams, bitter the sorrow
At the dawn when I wake up alone...

All the tears shed at the breaking of the dawn…
Each one for beauty, for the loved ones now gone.
They come to comfort me through the lonesome of the night
Until the day they bring me into the light.

Please sleep in peace,
As your dreambound voice will sing the melody
Unfit for tears, not for love, not for me…
Sweeter the dreams, bitter the sorrow
At the dawn when I wake up alone...

I feel your love o'er the distance of our hearts
Let no mountain stay us apart, let our love carry us together
Once upon a time, you were my world, my friends
Today, ever after, you’re the stars in my sky,
My everything, my angels…

The author's comments:
I wrote this in the memory of my late friends, who passed away about three weeks ago. They were the best friends I could ever hope or ask for...

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on Aug. 3 2010 at 9:59 pm
I ABSOLUTELY loved this!!!!!! It was reallly sad but the meaning was there and the passion too!! Keep writing it was amazing

bluespark13 said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 7:59 pm
i feel how you feel in this wonderful yet sad song..meaning this song is truely an amazing piece....keep writing

on Jun. 28 2010 at 8:09 pm
bluerose13 PLATINUM, Oceanside, California
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Favorite Quote:
Live your life to the fullest

 really like this song! it's speaks how you feel in the lyrics! please keep writing more!

on May. 7 2010 at 3:51 pm
ErinCole BRONZE, *******,
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this is amazing!! great job!!

on May. 4 2010 at 2:27 pm
Paul_James PLATINUM, Plainsboro, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only true love I ever knew
Was behind those downcast eyes
The only comfort I ever felt
Was during those long hours of loneliness
When I felt for you
I do believe
Only innocence can save the world..." -Ocean Soul

Since writing this song, and submitting it, I've made some corrections/revisions to the original lyrics.

The last line of the chorus: "At the dawn, when I wake up alone" is changed to "At the dawn, awaken forlorn". The word mountain in the final stanza has been changed to ocean.

The last change was in the second verse, "Until the day they bring me into the light" I revised it to "Until the day they come to bring me to the light".

I also changed the form of the plural words in the first stanza to singular, since singing this song became very confusing for me.


on Apr. 19 2010 at 7:17 pm
ZebraWithoutStripes ELITE, Blue Springs, Missouri
102 articles 8 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
To make a difference in the world, you have to be different from the world.

This is beautiful and touching. I'm so sorry about your friends.

on Apr. 15 2010 at 3:23 pm
Sincerely_Sammie GOLD, Baldwinsville, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Prove them all wrong."

Wow this is beautiful

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on Apr. 1 2010 at 8:14 pm
laaeira BRONZE, Kilgore, Texas
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i loved it it really touched me and made me start to think about somethings keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Mar. 24 2010 at 6:54 am
Bella913 SILVER, New City, New York
5 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Death is easy, living is harder."

this piece is so beautiful. i lost a family member in 2005 and will always remember he. thanks for the beauty and keep writing<3

on Mar. 24 2010 at 2:32 am
Allessandrea-Rukia SILVER, Hoppers Crossing, Other
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Favorite Quote:
You make a persuasive argument

it's beautiful (:

on Jan. 16 2010 at 2:51 pm
Ms.Understood, Laramie, Wyoming
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Your words speak to me because they are so ture and sincere. I more than love it. It's so touching when people really use what's inside they're hearts and I can really tell you used what was inside your heart. May your loved ones rest in peace along with mine.

on Jan. 16 2010 at 2:47 pm
Ms.Understood, Laramie, Wyoming
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Your words speak to me because they are so ture and sincere. I more than love it. It's so touching when people really use what's inside they're hearts and I can really tell you used what was inside your heart. May your loved ones rest in peace.

on Jan. 14 2010 at 11:38 am
Paul_James PLATINUM, Plainsboro, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only true love I ever knew
Was behind those downcast eyes
The only comfort I ever felt
Was during those long hours of loneliness
When I felt for you
I do believe
Only innocence can save the world..." -Ocean Soul

This song I've dedicated to the memory of one of my closer friends, Kenny Baker, who left this world only two weeks before our high school graduation...I will miss him eternally but I hope that through my music, I can hold onto the part of him that still lives on in me and all my friends and those who loved him...

mariah said...
on Jan. 8 2010 at 4:55 pm
these lyrics are meaningful to me because I have lost to many but still remember their voices and the way they look.

on Oct. 4 2009 at 5:10 am
ElizNieves PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
36 articles 13 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's funny. Don't ever tell anybody anything. If you do, you start missing everybody." The Catcher in the Rye

This is better than the crap I listen to

Rah for life said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 11:11 am
i love these lyrics i got lost for a second but they're very meaningful and very beautiful.

Kaylissa said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 2:19 pm
That was so nice of you to write this in memory of your friends. I am so sorry for your loss. Great writing and attention to detail. You have good word choice, too. Happy Writing!




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