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Angel-born smiles slip away
To forever sleep in grace,
Leave names to love forever, but what's in a name,
When farewell is too much to say
Through the tears falling from the face
Of those who will forever cherish the days

Please sleep in peace,
As your dreambound voice will sing the melody
Unfit for tears, not for love, not for me…
Sweeter the dreams, bitter the sorrow
At the dawn when I wake up alone...

All the tears shed at the breaking of the dawn…
Each one for beauty, for the loved ones now gone.
They come to comfort me through the lonesome of the night
Until the day they bring me into the light.

Please sleep in peace,
As your dreambound voice will sing the melody
Unfit for tears, not for love, not for me…
Sweeter the dreams, bitter the sorrow
At the dawn when I wake up alone...

I feel your love o'er the distance of our hearts
Let no mountain stay us apart, let our love carry us together
Once upon a time, you were my world, my friends
Today, ever after, you’re the stars in my sky,
My everything, my angels…




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TaylorDawnThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 5:35 pm:
wow! i loved this! and you wrote it yourself? i hope these lyrics carry you to somewhere special in life! you and your friends will be ruinited once more!
 
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KrystalT said...
Nov. 23, 2010 at 6:40 pm:
Oh my God. I'm so sorry for your loss. You're a great literary artist you know. I hope you go into the music business. I'm already a fan!
 
KrystalT replied...
Nov. 23, 2010 at 6:45 pm :
P.S. On your list of favorite people you made a mistake. It's Captan Jack Sparow. Haha!
 
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Tears of Light said...
Nov. 21, 2010 at 10:57 am:
the song shows so much passion and sorrow, it really moved me deep down! I'v written a couple songs but none as good as that! I suppose the pain you felt made the song more powerful! Keep feeling with pride! and keep t up!
 
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Luke C. said...
Nov. 3, 2010 at 6:33 pm:
Wow that really was amazing. I almost cried too when I read it, and, like vivig4ever said, I can feel the emotion you put into it, and it makes the writing all the move better. Keep it up! :)
 
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CocoStar said...
Nov. 3, 2010 at 6:27 pm:
Wow, beautiful imagery amazing rhymes, a sad song that makes me think. Amazing. Incredible. 
 
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CHStennisplayer2013 said...
Oct. 6, 2010 at 9:18 am:
This was amazing, it mad eme cry a little, keep writing!
 
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vivig4ever said...
Sept. 24, 2010 at 10:56 pm:
It's so deep. It's so cool how I can feel your emotion in what you write. I wish that vulnerability would show in my writing too. I quess it's just so much simpler to feel someone else's emotions than to feel my own. I think that's what holds me back from being a good writer. Anyways, I know it's sounds weird, but thanks for writing. Poetry is the one thing I don't have to fight for and don't have to lose. So simple...yet so intricate.
 
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pinkidinki101 said...
Aug. 3, 2010 at 9:59 pm:
I ABSOLUTELY loved this!!!!!! It was reallly sad but the meaning was there and the passion too!! Keep writing it was amazing
 
kms777 replied...
Aug. 11, 2010 at 4:13 pm :
i love this!!! its great i love the detail. the emotion. the way u can picture it. i just love it. i hope youll read some of mine and give me advice on how to make them better.
 
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bluespark13 said...
Aug. 3, 2010 at 7:59 pm:
i feel how you feel in this wonderful yet sad song..meaning this song is truely an amazing piece....keep writing
 
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bluerose13 said...
Jun. 28, 2010 at 8:09 pm:
 really like this song! it's speaks how you feel in the lyrics! please keep writing more!
 
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ErinCole said...
May 7, 2010 at 3:51 pm:
this is amazing!! great job!!
 
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Paul_James said...
May 4, 2010 at 2:27 pm:

Since writing this song, and submitting it, I've made some corrections/revisions to the original lyrics.

The last line of the chorus: "At the dawn, when I wake up alone" is changed to "At the dawn, awaken forlorn". The word mountain in the final stanza has been changed to ocean.

The last change was in the second verse, "Until the day they bring me into the light" I revised it to "Until the day they come to bring me to the light".

I also changed the form of the plural word... (more »)

 
DarkSunshine replied...
Jun. 20, 2012 at 12:26 pm :
Hi my name is tiffany and  i would just like to say that you are very talented and gifted i hope that you use these gifts to your advantage and goo dluck with life =)
 
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ZebraWithoutStripes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 19, 2010 at 7:17 pm:
This is beautiful and touching. I'm so sorry about your friends.
 
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Sincerely_Sammie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 3:23 pm:
Wow this is beautiful
 
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laaeira said...
Apr. 1, 2010 at 8:14 pm:
i loved it it really touched me and made me start to think about somethings keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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Bella913 said...
Mar. 24, 2010 at 6:54 am:
this piece is so beautiful. i lost a family member in 2005 and will always remember he. thanks for the beauty and keep writing<3
 
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Allessandrea-Rukia said...
Mar. 24, 2010 at 2:32 am:
it's beautiful (:
 
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