Brain cell

September 6, 2009
By misfit1 GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
misfit1 GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
Everyone has a God shaped void in their heart.
-Blaise Pascal


How can I escape
The prison of my mind
That has bars made of doubt
And no windows to find
Where I sleep on a bed made of regrets
And I lay my head on a pillow of sorrow
That’s harder than concrete
Yet wicked enough to swallow
All my hopes and dreams
Leave me broken and hollow
With no hope I scream
Only empty thoughts in which I can wallow


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on Jul. 28 2016 at 11:31 am
pineappler03 SILVER, Waterford, Connecticut
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wow! This is amazing!

on Aug. 8 2015 at 3:48 pm
Fernando_Acuna GOLD, Santa Maria, California
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Favorite Quote:
BE YOU AND SAY F*** YOU TO ANYBODY THAT DOESN'T LIKE IT. -Shane Dawson

loooove the name thoe, Brain Cell... lol, i get it--that's creative

on Jan. 27 2010 at 3:20 pm
oxStardustxo SILVER, State College, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I think we consider too much the good luck of the early bird and not enough the bad luck of the early worm.
Franklin D. Roosevelt

wow this is really good

misfit1 GOLD said...
on Sep. 18 2009 at 11:32 pm
misfit1 GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
10 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everyone has a God shaped void in their heart.
-Blaise Pascal

it originally was longer but i did not like the rest so i decided to scrap it and leave it as it is now. im glad you guys liked it(:

its more of a rock rhythm yes(:

luvlit10 said...
on Sep. 18 2009 at 5:28 pm
I agree with both of you. I agree with Rebecca on this isn't meant to be a song and with carnallace on songs aren't all in a somewhat particular format. This would make a great poem, I love it :).

carnallace said...
on Sep. 18 2009 at 4:18 pm
carnallace, Dsf, Pennsylvania
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Songs don't have any particular structure. The majority just tend to lean more toward the standard verse, bridge, chorus, verse, bridge chorus, etc. But there is no set outline for a lyric.

This piece was lovely. The title caught my attention immediately, and really defined the piece.

The rhyming was mostly on-key and your syllables equaled out, which is always important.

The sentiment was highly relatable but personal enough to allow the reader to interpret it themselves.

What type/style of music do you envision with this, if any? I imagined it as a sort of hard rock/indie rhythm, I guess mostly because of its beautifully simple and otherwise short length.

Either way, this was an excellent piece!

on Sep. 18 2009 at 10:06 am
Phoenix22 PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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This is amazing, but it is not set up to be a song. You usually have a separate verse and chorus.


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