Do You See?

October 9, 2010
By BradenBecknell GOLD, Portland, Texas
BradenBecknell GOLD, Portland, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"The truth is I gave my heart away, my whole heart, and I never quite got it back."


Do you see, what I see?
Perfectly together, you and me.
Is it possible? Can it be?
Deep and long, like the sea.

Just you and me, together.
Maybe we should? Or just not bother?
What if? Would it be better?
Could it be longer and stronger?


The author's comments:
It's one of my first poems. Please give me advice. Thanks.

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on Oct. 21 2010 at 8:59 am
BradenBecknell GOLD, Portland, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"The truth is I gave my heart away, my whole heart, and I never quite got it back."

Thank you! :)

on Oct. 20 2010 at 10:03 am
BradenBecknell GOLD, Portland, Texas
19 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth is I gave my heart away, my whole heart, and I never quite got it back."

Thanks for your encouragement! :)

on Oct. 19 2010 at 5:09 pm
Taylorrrrr SILVER, Plantsville, Connecticut
8 articles 1 photo 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
its hard to keep a secret if its written all over your body,

This is  really good. I think this should go in the magazine. But I like it.

 


on Oct. 19 2010 at 7:05 am
singingdetective SILVER, Sugar Land, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Out of a world of laughter,
suddenly I am sad.
Day and night, it haunts me,
the kiss I never had"
--Midsummer by Syndey King Russell

"Chances lost are hope's torn up pages"-- "Chances" by Five for Fighting

I like the way it is as though you're daydreaming, just pondering on the thought. It's very deep in that sense. :) good job!

mce1606 SILVER said...
on Oct. 18 2010 at 4:57 pm
mce1606 SILVER, Brooklyn Park, Minnesota
6 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
I tried to sniff coke once but the ice cubes got stuck in my nose

Love this poem! Good job, it shows so much emotion!!!


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