Confused

May 22, 2010
By sam013 DIAMOND, San Diego, California
sam013 DIAMOND, San Diego, California
63 articles 28 photos 33 comments

We are somewhat friends, you and me
My friends think we are meant to be
I do not think that I would mind
If in your heart, it is me you find
But the real me you have not seen



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on Jul. 19 2010 at 6:07 pm
crubs33 DIAMOND, Lido Beach, New York
58 articles 3 photos 750 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most courageous act is still to think for yourself. Aloud."- Coco Chanel
Life isn't about surviving the storm, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

Wow i love it!!!!  if you could please comment and rate my work that would be great!! especially to anonymous!!!! thanx and ur really good!!!!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jul. 11 2010 at 1:10 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Consider making it longer is a good idea lol .. but if you want to keep it a limerick then its just great the way it is.. I myself like long poems thats why .. I write freeverse :) but good job!

sam013 DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 10:01 pm
sam013 DIAMOND, San Diego, California
63 articles 28 photos 33 comments
thanks. i guess the title doesn't make much sense if you don't know what its about. i considered making it longer, but I like limericks on their own, and obviously since it is a limerick it can't be longer than 5 lines :)

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 9:36 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I like it, although I didnt really feel the title relating to this, maybe try to make it a bit longer and more creative title (?)


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