Me and You

September 11, 2009
I love you,
You love me,
Me and are meant to be.

We see fear,
We see cheer,
Me and you,
Our hearts are near,
Together forever is what is seems,
Me and you always in our dreams.

I loved you,
You loved me,
Me and you were meant to be.

We saw fear,
We saw cheer,
Me and you,
Our hearts were near,
Together forever is what it seemed,
Me and you,
Were always in our dreams.

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Fate98 said...
Apr. 24, 2011 at 6:42 am
Aw this is cute. I was singing it to the tune of Barney i asumed thats how it's ment to be read. If not well it works anyway lol
ilovedayna said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 3:54 pm
it reminds me of barney :) no offense. it's pretty good though
PeepLoveR said...
Feb. 17, 2011 at 2:25 pm
i really like how this poem flowed. it was really good
skittle luva=) said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 2:43 pm
i luuvv relates 2 me plz keep made me feel happy it reminded me of my ex he wuz ssoo kute =)
Glimmerglass said...
Nov. 21, 2010 at 1:50 pm
This was really sweet, and well composed, but you might want to submit under a different category. Haikus have a 5-7-5 syllable count and do not rhyme; otherwise, very nice!
D-ray's master! said...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 9:21 am
D-ray stop you complaining she is fine! but really you shouldnt forget words if you are going to post things on the internet! PROOFREAD!!it works wonders
D-Ray Son said...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 9:19 am
great job! :) but you are missing a word in the beginning..."you" other than that....awesome job
yandah said...
Sept. 16, 2010 at 1:31 pm
it was good and right my favorite part was "together forever is what it seemed"
DiamondsIntheGrass This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 8:00 am
well... i don't think this is a haiku. and it didn't really flow too well. it's a nice idea though, i like the present tense and then the change to past tense.
Khia_A. replied...
Sept. 16, 2010 at 1:47 pm
I agree that this is not a haiku but I like it. You should have did free verse but nice work.
Amiee replied...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 2:45 am

aww, cute! but still not haiku

would have done nice in the free verse place

GabrielleFantasy said...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 1:08 pm
I like the actualy poem, but a Haiku poem is 5-7-5.
Demon_of_Truth said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 4:45 pm
I think you need to review your poetry forms, haiku is 5-7-5. I'm almost positive that this is a balad or free verse . . . :(
musicalsuicide said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 1:52 pm
you need to count the sylables but other than that u are a great writer
9CatsPerLife101 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 7:47 pm
Is this a haiku? I don't know how you're counting the syllables, but I can't make it into 5-7-5. Maybe it's just me. :(
sasssgirrrl22 replied...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 8:50 pm
i like this. its realy cute. how r u counting the syllablez??
Bri Lane said...
Nov. 12, 2009 at 10:49 am
This is awesome! I love it. Great job. Please keep righting you are so good at it.
demartinot said...
Oct. 21, 2009 at 3:59 pm
This was an amazingly descriptive poem. When you said "I loved you, You loved me..." Do you still love eachother or was it just in the past? Also when you say "Our hearts are near." Do each of you know you love each other or is it secretive? This was a fantastic poem! Keep Writing!
I-Love-Him!!!! said...
Oct. 16, 2009 at 9:14 am
thanx i will try to keep up the good work
S.2.B.T.S. said...
Oct. 1, 2009 at 11:45 am
this is really gud
i feel like in sum kinda way i can relate to it.
keep up dha gud work!!!!!!!!
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