Ice engulfs the grass
Leafless dead trees frosted white
Spotted eyelashes
Leafless dead trees frosted white
Spotted eyelashes
This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.
Winter
AMAWHI said...
May 21, 2012 at 10:20 am:
May 21, 2012 at 10:20 am:
This haiku was great! This poem shows great imagery, I could just picture the snow on the persons eyelashes. The drawing next to the poem was also really good. Great job!
gabbru said...
May 21, 2012 at 7:35 am:
May 21, 2012 at 7:35 am:
I really liked this Haiku! You used personification in the first line, which really tied it together! nice job(;
rebeckabearHaiku is a form of Japanese poetry that combine three different lines and a noticeable grammatical break. The break, or kireji, is often replaced with commas or hyphens in English haiku. Haiku usually includes nature and everyday things and situations so don't think too hard about what to use as a topic. this is exactly what is is. i agree with every one you should stay writing because it is very beautful
PoetryAngel14Great imagery! It made a shiver run down my spine. Wonderful :)
TheIntellectualOne
TheChessKing
thinkaholic15so simple, so beautiful, so powerful and did I mention awesome imagery?? love it!!! simple, but powerful poems are the best poems and yours is one of them!! keep writing... :D
youknowwho AQ said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:04 pm:
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:04 pm:
Simple,but Good use of imagery.
DarkenRose
I have a question, what is a Haiku?
And what makes this 3 sentence piece so...special?
Haiku is a form of Japanese poetry that combine three different lines and a noticeable grammatical break. The break, or kireji, is often replaced with commas or hyphens in English haiku. Haiku usually includes nature and everyday things and situations so don't think too hard about what to use as a topic. Read more: How to Write a Haiku | eHow.com http://www.ehow.com/how_3336_write-haiku.html#ixzz0wltAHk6W
DiamondsIntheGrass
the first line is 5 syllables, the second its 7 syllables, and the third line is also 5. haikus originate from japan, and their special because they tend to be very short, but that makes the meaning come out stronger.
sammyso3
caughtinaxm0ment
oxStardustxoSimple, but u were able to get the point across. I think it si truly great keep the work up. :)
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