Except

Loving arms last forever
     Except when they don’t…
We’ll always stay together
     Except when you won’t…

Our love is a river
That never runs dry
     Except when we wither
     And aridly die.
Our faith is the wind
That boosts us high
     Except when we spiral
     Down from the sky.

To stay with you
Is my only goal
     Except when you break
     This young heart you stole.
I like to think life is mine alone,
That I have grasped it, EXCEPT
     You’re gone, nowhere to be found
     So vicious tears I’ve wept.






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PoeticAtheist said...
Aug. 16, 2015 at 5:01 pm
I love your work, but you seem to have a recurring problem with creating a beautiful rhythm and then breaking it at the end. All in all, amazing work
 
KittyKat1419 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 21, 2015 at 7:15 pm
I like the repetition piece of it and it's amazing. Keep up the good work.
 
ThePoeticJustice said...
Jul. 21, 2015 at 3:20 pm
before I say anything else, I just gotta tell ya how strong a beginning it has.It's like you've tried your hardest to keep the frustration, but they push harder, well put and well said, and like your other pieces, it's simply magnificent
 
Hanban12 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 20, 2015 at 5:59 pm
Beautiful, love the structure and flow of this poem. My only suggestion would be that you don't need to capitalize the last "except," since, in my opinion, it flows even better just by itself. Keep it up, I really love this poem, especially the last line.
 
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