Winter

December 11, 2014
By fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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She seemed

carefree and resilient

to the harsh winds

surrounding us.

 

"Can you hear it?"

She whispered.

 

"Hear what?"

 

Smiling. "The sound of snow.

Falling on the ground."

 

I closed my eyes

and focused.

 

It was soft.

 

A breath escaped my lips.

 

"...Yeah. I hear it."

 

Then, no more words

were uttered.

 

We were both captured

in the awe of winter,

by the sharp but silent

sting of wind,

 

by the exquisite sound

of snowflakes landing

on patches of grass

 

and by the clouded gray sky,

which seemed to be painted

with long brush strokes.

 

It was winter.

 

It meant frigid evenings

where we would sit outside.

Mugs of steaming coffee in our

hands,

 

contemplating the night sky

and possibly the stars if the

clouds were not covering the view.

 

And we would talk.

We would sing.

We would laugh.

And we would think.

 

And sip sweetened snowflakes.



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on Feb. 12 2015 at 7:20 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

I know what you mean

on Feb. 9 2015 at 7:46 pm
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Busy busy busy. I barely have time to write anymore. It's a shame.

on Feb. 3 2015 at 6:12 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

Same here. Ugh, busy life.

on Feb. 3 2015 at 5:52 pm
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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I am just working on my novel for now. I am really busy with schoolwork etc... so not really any poems. You?

on Feb. 2 2015 at 9:14 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

So...any new poems of yours are you working on?

on Jan. 13 2015 at 8:32 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

Same here! I usually write from experiences, but this time I didn't with my poem. Hey, actually, I could use your help. Could you look at it? I'm in need of some critiquing. It's at this link: TeenInk.com/poetry/all/article/754857/Simply-Lies/

on Jan. 12 2015 at 10:27 pm
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Surprisingly, you're right. Yes, it was from experiences that I've had, as most of my writings are. And about the question of the stories, they are short chapters, not poems, just lyrical and poetic in nature. They are stories though, with dialogue and characters, plot etc.

on Jan. 12 2015 at 4:45 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

Oh, duh. That must have been obvious, lol. :) (and I have no idea why my other comment was repeated, but anyway...) That's awesome! Is it like a story with poems in it or just a collection of poems? I haven't published any books of my poetry yet, but I definitely will soon. I have written so many I don't know what to do with them. Well, enter them in contests I suppose... Anyway, I have to ask...is Winter written from an experience you had or is it made up? My poem, Simply Lies, that was recently accepted for TeenInk was totally from my imagination, although it may seem it came from experiences I had. Is it the same way with yours? It sounded pretty deep. :)

on Jan. 11 2015 at 7:47 pm
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Yes, and I actually do write "poems" like these into a novel. Novels. It's actually an upcoming genre in the North American literature scene, to make chapters short (100-250 words), brief, poetic. Haha, I found out that you were probably a girl when you said that 'not many boys write poems' :P

on Jan. 10 2015 at 10:15 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

Well, I'm obviously a girl, and I have to say your poem was really impressive, even more now. ;) You are really good at it, and I'm not just saying that. :) Anyway, you are right. It is more like a story, but has a poem-like sound and feel. I write those kind of poems all the time. It feels like you can give the reader more meaning when you make it that way rather than just piece together words, know what I mean?

on Jan. 10 2015 at 12:41 pm
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Yes. I am a boy. xD I know what you mean. I feel like it is poetic in style but not really a poem in itself. The context is lyrical but its more of a story. I am not very good at poems. But o understand what you're saying haha :)

on Jan. 10 2015 at 10:19 am
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

Lol, you don't have to say anything. Um, just one question...are you a boy or a girl? Because if you are a boy that's even more shocking. Not many boys write poems, but I mean that in a good way. ;)

on Jan. 9 2015 at 8:47 pm
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Oh my... T-T I feel so grateful. I don't even know what to say ;;

on Jan. 9 2015 at 7:02 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

You should be getting millions of comments! Your poem was awesome! :)

on Jan. 9 2015 at 5:11 pm
fabrication BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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I am glad that my writing was able to reach you. I am also glad that I successfully created a "winter" using words (at least for you). Thank you for the comment.

on Jan. 8 2015 at 6:00 pm
Writer13 BRONZE, Washington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"May your mouth sing and your soul soar, but if your heart breaks that's all the more whole-hearted the words will make you, and you will soon unlock the summit of understanding." ~quote by me

Woaw, that was beautiful! Absolutely amazing how you capture the complete essence of the dead of winter. It took my breathe away!

Writer13 said...
on Jan. 8 2015 at 5:50 pm
Woaw, that was beautiful! Absolutely amazing how you capture the very essence of the dead of winter. It took my breathe away!




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