Bees Knees This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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You tell me that honey always
attracts more bees than vinegar.
I hate your clichés, so I ask you
Why would I want to attract bees?
All they do is scare you
And sting.

You say
not to be such a cynic,
There are too many of them
And you’re too sweet
To begin a life of doubt
now.
You think my negative thoughts
won’t get me anywhere at all.

Which makes me ask,
where was I planning to go?
I’m doing fine right here.

You tell me that eventually
I will have to go
because all good things
must come to an end.
Have I told you
that I hate your clichés?

I kiss your honeycomb hair
and tell you
that you might be the one
with all the honey, but I’m the one
with the bee’s knees.
And that’s the one cliché I really
don’t mind.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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anteaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 28 at 1:22 pm
I like this poem. I think it's great! :)
 
green_eyes17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 20, 2011 at 1:34 pm
I enjoy this. It makes me smile. Because I am this ornery. :)
 
Loverboy12 said...
Jun. 30, 2011 at 12:34 am
I aplaud this poem becuase of the clever level you took it to.  just proves that smart moths are some of the funniest people to be around.
 
CaptainFabulous. said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 10:24 pm
ohh i like this :)
love the last cliche
 
Paig3Cagl3 said...
Nov. 5, 2009 at 3:02 pm
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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Inkspired said...
Sept. 10, 2009 at 7:52 pm
I love this! I love the cynicism and the way the only cliche you like is bee's knees. I have to admit, I totally don't know what this is, and I'd like to know. Would someone tell me?
 
randiead said...
Aug. 26, 2009 at 4:10 am
Thanks for all of your comments! I would love to read your work, I'm always up for something new to read.
 
EdytD said...
Aug. 25, 2009 at 1:15 am
Nice! I recently did an assignment w/ my history teacher about old cliches from teh 1920's, and the bees knees was one of them, which is why this poem grabbed my attention. It's a really great poem, though, and really shows the inner conflict of the narrator.
I loved the strong imagery describing both the narrator and the person he/she is talking to. Great job!

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