Bees Knees MAG

December 9, 2008
By Randie Adler BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
Randie Adler BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
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You tell me that honey always
attracts more bees than vinegar.
I hate your clichés, so I ask you
Why would I want to attract bees?
All they do is scare you
And sting.

You say
not to be such a cynic,
There are too many of them
And you’re too sweet
To begin a life of doubt
now.
You think my negative thoughts
won’t get me anywhere at all.

Which makes me ask,
where was I planning to go?
I’m doing fine right here.

You tell me that eventually
I will have to go
because all good things
must come to an end.
Have I told you
that I hate your clichés?

I kiss your honeycomb hair
and tell you
that you might be the one
with all the honey, but I’m the one
with the bee’s knees.
And that’s the one cliché I really
don’t mind.



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antea GOLD said...
on Feb. 28 2017 at 1:22 pm
antea GOLD, Tirana, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Not all who wander, are lost..."

I like this poem. I think it's great! :)

on Sep. 20 2011 at 1:34 pm
green_eyes17 BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
As if I could pick just one.

I enjoy this. It makes me smile. Because I am this ornery. :)

on Jun. 30 2011 at 12:34 am
Loverboy12 BRONZE, Bakersfield, California
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Favorite Quote:
Stoooopid is as stoopid does

I aplaud this poem becuase of the clever level you took it to.  just proves that smart moths are some of the funniest people to be around.

on Feb. 3 2010 at 10:24 pm
CaptainFabulous. GOLD, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
PERSONAL FAVORITE QUOTE::::

"When life hands you lemons,make BEEF STEW!"
-Andy Milanokis?(sp)

ohh i like this :)

love the last cliche

on Nov. 5 2009 at 3:02 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

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on Sep. 10 2009 at 7:52 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

I love this! I love the cynicism and the way the only cliche you like is bee's knees. I have to admit, I totally don't know what this is, and I'd like to know. Would someone tell me?

randiead said...
on Aug. 26 2009 at 4:10 am
Thanks for all of your comments! I would love to read your work, I'm always up for something new to read.

EdytD SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 1:15 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Nice! I recently did an assignment w/ my history teacher about old cliches from teh 1920's, and the bees knees was one of them, which is why this poem grabbed my attention. It's a really great poem, though, and really shows the inner conflict of the narrator.

I loved the strong imagery describing both the narrator and the person he/she is talking to. Great job!



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