A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Aug. 6 2010 at 11:31 pm
pinkypromise23 PLATINUM, Cranston, Rhode Island
30 articles 0 photos 414 comments

Favorite Quote:
i know that you believe you understand what you think i said, but im not sure you realize that what you heard is not what i meant.

haha i know right? (:

on Aug. 6 2010 at 2:56 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

nice. very flowy just like a poem should be. and comes to a natural and graceful stop.  this is so cool. good metaphors.

 

but i have no idea what you are talking about.


on Aug. 6 2010 at 11:35 am
Katie_Grey DIAMOND, Leipsic, Ohio
58 articles 10 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
Difficult is not impossible - Relient K, "Hope for Every Fallen Man"


If all I had was love, would I still be lovely?
If all I gave was love, would you give up on me?
-House of Heroes, "Love is for the Middle Class"

It's good, very good. I like the way it flows from one thought to the next. And at the end it feels finished, I like that. Not all writers can pull that off so well.

I know there'd be some poems of mine you might like, but they're pending for now.

It would be great if you checked out the one that is there though.


on Jul. 15 2010 at 6:34 pm
alaskatrailmutt, Jefferson, Maryland
0 articles 0 photos 352 comments
I naturally write like that. In my emails, then I know my freinds will laugh and I delet it. I like ur style its like thinking. I like what you said I get it completley. I think the same way about what you talked about. That was amezing. Thanks for writng that. Looked at ur profile, nice I liked it. Wish mine was that nice XD

on Jul. 15 2010 at 5:54 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I totally agree - thinking about what this means is waht makes it so intriguing and interesting. Great stuff!! Check me out? Thanks and keep on writing!

inspir3d GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2010 at 4:47 pm
inspir3d GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
11 articles 2 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
We're all just looking for attention, to be discovered overnight. We're all frustrated by the popular ones that claim the limelight before they fall to pieces. So many of us are stuck under the radar--what makes me different? You decide!

SO PROFOUND. i love it. finally a poem that engages your brain and not just your eyes. I wish i could say i understand everything you said, but that's part of the wonder of it. Great work!

on Jul. 15 2010 at 4:12 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2217 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Favorited. There's something about this poem that winds and twists around my soul, making me hungry and satisfied. Wishing for more.

on Jul. 15 2010 at 1:11 pm
carvedinwood BRONZE, Bayside, New York
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
one must still have chaos within oneself to be able to give birth to a dancing star
- Friedrich Nietzsche

it's a phenomenal poem.

on Jul. 15 2010 at 11:35 am
MercedesXO DIAMOND, South Easton, Massachusetts
52 articles 0 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I realize that life is risks. It's acknowledging the past but looking forward. It's taking chances that we will make mistakes but believeing we all deserve to be forgiven."
-The Dead Tossed Waves.

nice work, this is great:)

i really enjoyed it and loveee your style of writing. it seems elegant and thoughtful, yet deep and true. great job!

i recently joined the site and most of my work hasn't been accepted but id love for you to view what has been and see what you think


on Jul. 15 2010 at 1:49 am
secretdancer22 GOLD, Webster Groves, Missouri
10 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hidden cry's are beneath every smile"
-Jordon Himmler

I love this you are very talented and keep it up.Check out some of my work

on Jun. 23 2010 at 6:32 pm
Shorty26088 BRONZE, Grand Ledge, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
I want to know that one day when I walk out of here that I changed someones life - By Stasia

Your truly talented and I love it, but next time i truly hope you chose a different picture that expresses the poem but keep on writing

on Jun. 23 2010 at 6:22 pm
purplepebbles BRONZE, Naples, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't cry because its over, Smile because it happened!

wow....i am so powerfully moved by your gentle, soft words. I totally feel i connected with the message you bring to everyone! i absolutely loved it! 

on Jun. 23 2010 at 1:19 pm
jbutterfly10 GOLD, Bloomsburg, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is a time for everything under the sun:~

That was really good, really deep, really beautiful. Good job!!!

on Jun. 23 2010 at 12:55 pm
Annabelle294 SILVER, Branford, Connecticut
9 articles 0 photos 64 comments
This is amazing, the words flow beautifully

on Jun. 23 2010 at 10:05 am
-daydreamer- SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Carpe.... Carpe diem. Seize the day, boys. Make your lives extraordinary." ---Robin Williams, "Dead Poets Society"

I absolutely loved this. It's beautiful, just simply beautiful.

on Jun. 1 2010 at 9:37 pm
fob-fan5 SILVER, Brockon, Ma, Massachusetts
6 articles 0 photos 18 comments
amazing job :)

on Jun. 1 2010 at 7:50 pm
Madison22 BRONZE, Kittery Point, Maine
2 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give up!

ya it had the same affects on me...don't stop writing....i agree!! i like the end a lot! how were you inspired? did it just come to you? i feel like a lot of my best writing is when it just comes.

on Jun. 1 2010 at 7:49 pm
Madison22 BRONZE, Kittery Point, Maine
2 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give up!

i think praise can be a good thing...it encourages writers, it doesn't turn them into egos. Egos are people that are egos already previously before they were told "your writings awesome' or something like that

on Jun. 1 2010 at 6:52 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that's why they call it the present.

the ego thing is so true! i like that

on Jun. 1 2010 at 4:19 pm
TheSummoningFreak PLATINUM, Lugoff, South Carolina
41 articles 0 photos 122 comments

Favorite Quote:
if you can never let yourself fall you'll never know what it's like to love

i love this!!



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