A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Jan. 7 2011 at 4:57 pm
MhsAnonymous SILVER, Morristown, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a dream. Its perfect until you wake up into reality.

You are amazing. You have great talents. When i read this i was so deep into the atmosphere and mood. Please keep writing.

on Jan. 7 2011 at 12:31 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

love it!! especially the last lines ''So i just sit and wait for the tide to come in''

migwam ELITE said...
on Jan. 7 2011 at 11:19 am
migwam ELITE, Tumwater, Washington
240 articles 20 photos 152 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never let the future disturb you. You will meet it, if you have to, with the same weapons of reason which today arm you against the present." --Marcus Aurelius

Wow... this was beautiful... like, I don't know. It felt familiar, like I could touch it and maybe it would sting me or something, haha. This is a really amazing poem and I genuinely hope you keep writing until you're really old and have to make someone hold a pen for you :]

gfgdfgsdf said...
on Jan. 7 2011 at 10:28 am
this is really good!

on Jan. 7 2011 at 9:04 am
Ronaldo Zhang BRONZE, Andover, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

THIs is sooooo deep i love this mannn

 


on Dec. 24 2010 at 10:35 am
miss-silverwing GOLD, St. Louis, Missouri
16 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd like to flood the streets of your heart with everything I cannot say.

Hm...Honestly, this isn't my favorite poem of yours. I feel like the line breaks are perhaps a little too short and abrupt, and for some reason, I have difficulty connecting emotionally with this poem. I like the last few lines, though.

.Boo. BRONZE said...
on Dec. 16 2010 at 8:15 pm
.Boo. BRONZE, Humboldt, Iowa
2 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Judge a man not by the answers he knowsbut by the questions he asks.Voltaire
Nothing in life is so exhilarating as to be shot at without result.WinstonChurchill
I will permit no man to narrow and degrade my soul by makin me hate him.BookerWashington

PERFECT. i feel the same way every night

on Dec. 16 2010 at 1:30 pm
heather_marie PLATINUM, Deshler, Ohio
21 articles 2 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\"Meeting you was fate, becoming your friend was a choice, but falling in love with you was beyond my control

wow tht was amazing i love the imagry and the choice of words!

on Dec. 16 2010 at 12:17 pm
elizabitch BRONZE, Westminster, Colorado
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Friends are like condoms.
They're there for when things get hard.

veryy nicee..:)

Aysia SILVER said...
on Dec. 16 2010 at 12:32 am
Aysia SILVER, Erie, Colorado
5 articles 7 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Every child is an artist. The problem is how to remain an artist once he grows up - Pablo Picasso

Beautiful! Very wonderful images flashing through my mind. You seem like you were sad while writing this. I love it! keep writing, ill read it.

on Nov. 29 2010 at 7:48 pm
Gracious PLATINUM, Go Away, Kansas
22 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"life sucks and then you die, yeah, i should be so lucky"



-Jacob, Twilight

I’m still that girl who falls when she runs, Getting back up, because falling is fun.

loveloveloveloveloved it

on Nov. 25 2010 at 7:22 am
elvinchangling55 SILVER, Malverne, New York
6 articles 0 photos 50 comments
Love it, you are truly talented and the imagery is killer. I love the part 'pitter pattering of my soul across the aluminum roof of my mind'. Great work!!

on Nov. 24 2010 at 10:09 pm
phlogiston ELITE, Hermitage, Tennessee
224 articles 0 photos 117 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A day without laughter is a day wasted" -Charlie Chaplin

Wow I loved the flow. Very good work

on Nov. 24 2010 at 10:44 am
Rulesofmyown GOLD, Saida, Other
11 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
Learn from yesterday, live for today, hope for tomorrow

this is beautiful and moving as well...keep up the good work!:) check out some of my work when u get the chance...thanks:)

Flora SILVER said...
on Nov. 24 2010 at 3:57 am
Flora SILVER, Allen Park, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Darkness does not always equate to evil, just as light does not always bring good.

Wow, It's woderfully written.

This reminds me of what happened between me and my "best-friend"


on Nov. 2 2010 at 6:04 pm
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark

Thank all of you so very much for all your comments and critisisms... It brightens my day everytime I hear how my work makes you feel and effects you... :)

 

<3 Andrewsaur


on Nov. 2 2010 at 6:01 pm
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark

It is largely about a distants that was growing between me and one of my closest friends and my thoughts and feelings about it.

KimB92 GOLD said...
on Nov. 2 2010 at 4:49 pm
KimB92 GOLD, South Plainfield, New Jersey
14 articles 0 photos 1 comment
This is beautifully written and I really enjoyed it. Along with everyone else, I like the imagery but I'm not clear on what the meaning is. That isn't necesarilly a bad thing though. Poetry should have a little mystery to it. I believe this is about some sort of loss? Fill us in haha (:

amandaa SILVER said...
on Nov. 2 2010 at 3:49 pm
amandaa SILVER, Lysekil, Other
7 articles 2 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Set a goal so big that if you achieved it, it would blow your mind." -The Secret

wow, this is absolutely beautiful. it leaves me speechles..

on Nov. 2 2010 at 11:53 am
oliverSyykes BRONZE, Ponoka, Other
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
- there are things that will make it hard to smile in the future, but no matter what you see, you gotta keep that smile on your face - Tupac Shakur

Nice nice, i don't really get the point of it but it is very deep. So fill me in if you can


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