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A Play On A Play On Words This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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loverrrgiirlxx said...
Sept. 6, 2011 at 9:56 am:
i love this !
 
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TotheSea said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 5:24 pm:
Wow.  This is melodic, is the word I would use to describe it!  Of course, great poetry can't be described in words.
 
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Laura_Oliver said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 12:23 pm:
This would make a really good song, especially the 'stanza' that rhymes..."But I don't know what to think/Or where to begin/So I just sit and wait/For the tide to come in". And I would really appreciate it if you checked out my poems, like "True Colors". Well, anyway, good job!!!
 
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NothingSpecial said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 11:07 am:
I love this poem! It is very creative and just beautiful!!!
 
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VintageWriter said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 11:02 am:
I love this, the emotion, the feeling, the play on words! Every thing about it just wow! Amazing, well done sir, well done.
 
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Gracie597 said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 9:48 am:
I like it(:
 
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HateKnuckle said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 10:55 pm:
Little difficult to understand. Its what I imagine it would be like to read James Joyce. Interesting and good cause you have to read it over again.......and again.
 
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I like pie said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:19 pm:
I don't want to sound weird, but i'm not a member, and i really want to be. May i please use someones password?
 
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LunaIsNotHere said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 11:53 pm:
I don't get it :)
 
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MonaLisaSmile said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 9:34 pm:
Really really good! :)
 
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KatPantle said...
Jul. 2, 2011 at 8:51 pm:
lovely. bravo*
 
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jj1997 said...
Jul. 2, 2011 at 4:34 pm:
i love this it most deffinantly touched my heart and its amazing
 
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MorningStar15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 9:55 pm:
wow I am in l o v e   <3
 
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Krikette This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 10, 2011 at 11:50 pm:
Brilliant! I loved how the poem says the opposite of what is expected in lines like "It's time to go inside/ to survive/ the cold of the air conditioning/ in my room it's harsh living". The poem also does a good job capturing the emotion of the speaker. Well done.
 
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RanaHewezi1998This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 10, 2011 at 5:49 pm:
dAt's AMAZING!
 
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leafyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 10, 2011 at 3:39 pm:
what issue is this poem printed in?
 
Andrewsaur This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 10, 2011 at 3:51 pm :
February 2009
 
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K.M.S.Shear said...
Jun. 10, 2011 at 6:42 am:
i love the way you used the words.
 
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Sky.. said...
May 19, 2011 at 11:38 pm:
I don't understand it.
 
gogreen1 replied...
Jun. 10, 2011 at 1:11 pm :
I think that's the point...
 
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