A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Mar. 22 2012 at 8:56 am
Zero_Black BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
1 article 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you love something, then let it go,
If it comes back, it's yours forever,
If it leaves you, then it was never meant to be.

this is really nice! i like the idea itself, of course, but the way you wrote it was very pretty. i especially like the part with the air and the room. 

Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Mar. 22 2012 at 7:02 am
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
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Hey! So i know i already commented, but i came back and reread it... and I am very glad i did! IT is still truly amazing, creative, and all around good. But i think i begin to understand it a bit more! Thank you for sharing and Congrats!!

:)


on Feb. 29 2012 at 5:40 pm
kimani grandy SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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yo ... Bro this is like awesome ... i like how you ended it. I look forward to reading more :)!

 


on Feb. 29 2012 at 5:26 pm
ClaudeTheDemonButler BRONZE, Poca, West Virginia
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Even in the dark i see the light

Very beautiful. Also very well constructed. LOVE It

james14 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 29 2012 at 2:17 pm
james14 BRONZE, Charlotte, North Carolina
1 article 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Worst excuse for not turning in homework: 'I couldn't find anyone to copy it from'".

this is so beautiful!!!!!!!!! the metaphors are so awesome!!!!!!!!!

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on Feb. 29 2012 at 9:17 am
Annoymous, Arlignton, Virginia
0 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Respect yourself
and others will respect you

three comments down someone wrote keep up the god work instead of good work lol keep up the god work :)

on Feb. 7 2012 at 3:16 pm
laurensoccer SILVER, Palm Beach Gardens, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 67 comments
Beautiful just beautiful!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 9:13 pm
rescuetruck607 GOLD, Bellmore, New York
13 articles 28 photos 6 comments
amazing! truly perfect keep up the god work!!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 7:21 pm
HinataHyuga SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
To never give up is my nindo, my ninja way. I can't run before taking my first step. A place to return to is were someone always thinks of you. Naruto-kun. Miso ramen. Back off kushina tomato Minato is mine! Kingmortha is my BFFFFF on teenink!

Oh man! You make me seem like childs play. Amazzzzzzzzzzzzzzzing!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 4:14 pm
phoebesara BRONZE, Bloomsburg, Pennsylvania
2 articles 4 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All say, 'how hard it is that we have to die'-a strange complaint to come from the mouths of people who have had to live." ---- Mark Twain

i love this poem...you have so much talent! this is a great piece

on Jan. 16 2012 at 1:24 pm
wayfollower SILVER, Colorado Springs, Colorado
6 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me."
- The Holy Bible
"Gravitation cannot be held responsible for people falling in love."
-Albert Einstein

Wow, this is such an amazing piece. Only someone with a true gift can write like this. This is fantastic, so creative. Amazing!

dya.o PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 10:57 am
dya.o PLATINUM, Milton, Florida
43 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If consensus is overrated, I think balance is, too.
I have no interest in living a balanced life.
I want a life of adventure.” | Chris Guillebeau

WOW......That is amazing. keep writing!!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 8:46 am
Amber4141610 SILVER, Fairmount Heights, Maryland
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
To be nobody but yourself, in a world which is doing its best day and night to make you anyone else, means fighting the hardest battle which any human being can ever fight...And never stop fighting.
-E. E. Cummings

Speechless...Wow

on Jan. 16 2012 at 12:10 am
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

this poem is so good, it makes my stomach ache with jealousy. you're a FANTASTIC writer. i can't even begin to explain.. you're just THAT good. never stop writing, please. i'm just speechless.

on Jan. 4 2012 at 12:15 pm
AndSoItGoes01 GOLD, Reno, Nevada
10 articles 0 photos 149 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The winter I told you icicles are magic, you stole an enormous icicle from my neighbors shingle, and gave it to me as a gift, I kept it in my freezer for seven months. Love isn't always magic, sometimes it's melting." -Andrea Gibson

Words can't describe how good you are. Please! I beg you, keep writing!!!! :)

on Dec. 25 2011 at 11:55 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
14 articles 0 photos 179 comments
This is simply amazing.

on Dec. 25 2011 at 7:48 pm
aurorairis SILVER, Darien, Connecticut
6 articles 0 photos 27 comments
This is my ultimate favorite! Its so deep!! So wonderful! Don't EVER stop writing!! Please read and comment on some of my work!

Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Dec. 25 2011 at 12:43 pm
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
4 articles 1 photo 157 comments
Amazing.... creative... inspirational.... wow. Though i would never claim to fully understand a work of art, or to try and wrap it into a neat little box, i think i sorta understand what you are trying to say.... and its beautiful. THank you and please keep writing! :)

on Dec. 25 2011 at 9:31 am
MingMing98 BRONZE, Roy, Washington
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments
I really liked this! You're an amazing writer

on Dec. 11 2011 at 11:49 am
muna.najihah PLATINUM, Malacca, Other
25 articles 14 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
if life was given two choices, to become a writer or a character, I will choose to become a writer.
I have the power to decide what my life should be.

when i go through it once, i don't really get it.

after reading it again, i understand just how beautiful it means. love it





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