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When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Zero_Black said...
Mar. 22, 2012 at 8:56 am:
this is really nice! i like the idea itself, of course, but the way you wrote it was very pretty. i especially like the part with the air and the room. 
 
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Fia-fia said...
Mar. 22, 2012 at 7:02 am:

Hey! So i know i already commented, but i came back and reread it... and I am very glad i did! IT is still truly amazing, creative, and all around good. But i think i begin to understand it a bit more! Thank you for sharing and Congrats!!

:)

 
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Kimani G. said...
Feb. 29, 2012 at 5:40 pm:

yo ... Bro this is like awesome ... i like how you ended it. I look forward to reading more :)!

 

 
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ClaudeTheDemonButler said...
Feb. 29, 2012 at 5:26 pm:
Very beautiful. Also very well constructed. LOVE It
 
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james14 said...
Feb. 29, 2012 at 2:17 pm:
this is so beautiful!!!!!!!!! the metaphors are so awesome!!!!!!!!!
 
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Annoymous said...
Feb. 29, 2012 at 9:17 am:
three comments down someone wrote keep up the god work instead of good work lol keep up the god work :)
 
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laurensoccer This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 7, 2012 at 3:16 pm:
Beautiful just beautiful!
 
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rescuetruck607 said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:13 pm:
amazing! truly perfect keep up the god work!!
 
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NigomayNamikaze said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 7:21 pm:
Oh man! You make me seem like childs play. Amazzzzzzzzzzzzzzzing!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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phoebesara said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 4:14 pm:
i love this poem...you have so much talent! this is a great piece
 
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auswagg said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 1:24 pm:
Wow, this is such an amazing piece. Only someone with a true gift can write like this. This is fantastic, so creative. Amazing!
 
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FuturePoetThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 10:57 am:
WOW......That is amazing. keep writing!!
 
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Amber4141610This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 8:46 am:
Speechless...Wow
 
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alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 12:10 am:
this poem is so good, it makes my stomach ache with jealousy. you're a FANTASTIC writer. i can't even begin to explain.. you're just THAT good. never stop writing, please. i'm just speechless.
 
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FakesmileThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 12:15 pm:
Words can't describe how good you are. Please! I beg you, keep writing!!!! :)
 
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MoraleAsh said...
Dec. 25, 2011 at 11:55 pm:
This is simply amazing.
 
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aurorairis said...
Dec. 25, 2011 at 7:48 pm:
This is my ultimate favorite! Its so deep!! So wonderful! Don't EVER stop writing!! Please read and comment on some of my work!
 
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Fia-fia said...
Dec. 25, 2011 at 12:43 pm:
Amazing.... creative... inspirational.... wow. Though i would never claim to fully understand a work of art, or to try and wrap it into a neat little box, i think i sorta understand what you are trying to say.... and its beautiful. THank you and please keep writing! :)
 
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killjoy74 said...
Dec. 25, 2011 at 9:31 am:
I really liked this! You're an amazing writer
 
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muna.najihah said...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 11:49 am:

when i go through it once, i don't really get it.

after reading it again, i understand just how beautiful it means. love it

 
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