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Disputationi Mortem

It hasn't been long now,
or could it?
A day, maybe a year;
Time doesn't exist with her.
I'm glad it doesn't,
I prefer to be here forever,
In her embrace,
In her heart,
In the words she speaks.
My heart beats solely for her;
It chooses no one else.
The pull of her presence,
And the sound of her voice,
The daze in her eyes,
And the feel of her lips.
To live without her, I cannot think it possible.
To live without her, I mustn't think it possible.
If I were to die, would she be there to hold me?
Would she hold my Heart like always,
or would she mend it,
make it whole,
and end my serenity with pain.
Does she knows it is hers?
It is a gift I hope is not exchanged,
I cannot think she would,
I mustn't think she would.
How far we've come.
It hasn't been far,
Time doesn't exist.
She doesn't exist,
Does that mean neither should I?
But if she were to exist,
would she love me as I would,
and hold me as I've never been?
Only time will tell,
Only, time will lie.




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MishMosh said...
today at 5:50 pm:
I like it, it's very moving. There is only one thing I would change. "the time doesn't exist" and "she doesn't exist" around. I think this because it would sound like the the person means more to you than time does. But I might be completely wrong, you might be implying this written work in a totally different perspective. I love what you did here and keep up the good work. Cheers.  
 
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Jonah_xD said...
today at 3:37 pm:
Hey great job on this! I can really read the emotion in each othe lines. Some of the lines get a little repetitive or redundant, but I really like the overall effect. Well done; keep up the good work!
 
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EvetteTThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 28 at 1:12 am:
  What's the meaning of the title.  
 
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EvetteTThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 28 at 1:10 am:
  This is awesome. You use a lot of description which is really good. Am giving it 5 stars because I love it. Excellent work!!!  
 
JackShadow22 replied...
yesterday at 12:27 pm :
Thank you, I do apprecitate it. The Title is Latin for Timeless Death.
 
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