Another Metaphor of Life This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

October 14, 2008
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
all doomed to


at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time




everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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sweetness1994 said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 11:07 am
All I could think when I read this was...WOW!
annkaykay2011 said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 12:12 am
I loved it!
I liked the beginning best
god's just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
all doomed to
it has the climax in the metaphor that
brings you in to really think about it!
Alliekat said...
Mar. 20, 2009 at 11:49 pm
it is a beautiful metaphor! keep up the good work! i hope to read more of your work!!!
Tessa W. said...
Feb. 20, 2009 at 5:52 pm
im not a huge fan of metaphors. But this one really makes sense. I know what this poem has a meaning. Its kinda like explaining life.You should write more like this.I loved it good job
Chrissypeace said...
Feb. 18, 2009 at 12:01 am
I like the poem very much. but i hate to think, that when i die, eventually i will be forgotten. I do not believe that to be entirely true. I think we all of the chance to have our memory live on forever. It depends on what we spend our lives doing.
Adams replied...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 11:33 am
Hey, author here. ^^ See, my point is that nothing is actually "forever" in the literal sense; considering the universe is billions of years old, someday each human being's "mark" (though it may have lasted for thousands of years) will disappear. Still, I do agree that we can leave a mark for a considerable time on humanity.
WriterGurl09 said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 7:29 pm
This is a great poem and you should keep writing
VanDeman said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 6:29 am
the idea is very complete and its simplicity makes it very rateable. i'm diggn' it!
Andrnick replied...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 9:55 pm
This Poem isn't really that great because there's religions out there that have different meanings but for the life part it is very good in figuartive laungage.
Believe me, I'm a fan of figuartive laungage, it makes me write better and more understanding for the other readers that read my work.
flipflopsandsox said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 2:25 am
the metaphor was cliche, but it had a unique message =]
Br3zziFlow3d said...
Jan. 30, 2009 at 5:50 pm
The poem was definitly amazing because you can grab an element so young and transform it into the way that we should think about life. Keep it up girl!
Peaceseeker said...
Jan. 27, 2009 at 11:39 pm
I really like this. it's like cute but then deep? I'm really not sure what i'm saying but hey GREAT poem! YOUR AWESOME AT WRITING KEEP DOING IT!!!
pugobelle said...
Jan. 25, 2009 at 9:48 pm
very nice poem! i love it!
icecold said...
Jan. 21, 2009 at 8:03 pm
wow aaamazin
sallysunshine said...
Jan. 21, 2009 at 4:53 pm
kungfupanda11 said...
Jan. 21, 2009 at 3:24 pm
thats an amazing poem! i <3 it!
bloob said...
Jan. 14, 2009 at 7:52 pm
jamie95 said...
Jan. 11, 2009 at 12:31 am
that poem was so awesome. u r a lyrical genious
DonnieDotNet said...
Jan. 6, 2009 at 9:03 pm
I really, really, really love this. Can anyone tell me though, how long it takes for your piece of writing to be picked for the magazine?
AndThisIsReal said...
Jan. 5, 2009 at 4:05 pm
I wasn't a huge fan of the metaphor. But then I red your take on it. And now I'm thinking... I understand it and at the same time not so sure what I think of it. Maybe a little too simple of a take on such a big subject....LIFE. However your very right it was presented lightheartedly and it can be at the same time slightly cynical. True. True.
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