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Another Metaphor of Life MAG

October 14, 2008
By Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.

© Brianna C., Lincoln Park, MI

The author's comments:
I happened to be blowing bubbles in my room when my thoughts suddenly took a semi-philosophical turn and came up with this metaphor. I liked the idea immediately, if only because it was both lighthearted and yet potentially cynical (in pointing out that a person's life, no matter how long his/her "imprint" lasts, will fade away eventually).
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Captain_Awesome BRONZE said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 9:22 pm
Captain_Awesome BRONZE, Crystal River, Florida
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I really like it but the only thing is that I am absolutely we are more important to GOD than bubbles popping. I understand its a metaphor and great poem! :D But maybe when we evaporate theres another place we go...
Dallywood45 SILVER said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 5:13 pm
Dallywood45 SILVER, Miles, Texas
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I agree!! =]
Dallywood45 SILVER said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 5:11 pm
Dallywood45 SILVER, Miles, Texas
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Really good Metaphor...
britty said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 1:02 pm

this is prettygood :)

 

heyshay BRONZE said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 12:26 pm
heyshay BRONZE, Streamwood, Illinois
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I chose this poem, because my dad calls me bubbles.  I thought this was a really good poem because its showing how everyone leaves a mark, and the bubbles do that same.  Also, how you're describing of the popping of the bubbles and how you are in a way comparing losing the bubbles and closely losing people and how they can blow or pop or how people can blow or snap quickly.  You did a really good job on writing this poem. It was really good the way you broke up the lines with how you put the word pop seperated. It was really good.
Angel_17 said...
on Feb. 21 2011 at 11:57 pm
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I loved how you used God with the bubbles to make a point:) 
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on Jan. 31 2011 at 10:30 pm
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Brilliant Poem! Great Job =D I loved how you connected bubbles to life!! Please see my poem called i know i wont Thank you so much and again great job!!! :D :D :D
WriterGeek<3 said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 9:41 pm
I love that you create  a feeling that we could  connect to as yound children. Your poem creates an impression of timelessness. Simple and profound. The best combination.
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 8:57 pm
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND, Parker, Colorado
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simply beautiful!!! i love it!! :)

also, if you get the chance could you check out my poems The sinners confession and a mirror image (& comment and rate them???) it would be greatly appreciated! THANKS!!!

gleek1234 GOLD said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 8:23 pm
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GREAT JOB DARLING! :)
nobodyanymore said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 7:12 pm
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This is beatuiful, I've read it over and over again and every time I get something new from it. It's light and a little carefree at first, but after the first time you start to realize it's a bit darker. Very cool. (:
UNKNOWN........ said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 5:45 pm
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wonderful metaphors!

 

Chana said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 5:44 pm
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"Life is where its at." IFLY.<3

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This was Totemo Kawaii! Very Cute. XD
Kat_K BRONZE said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 4:46 pm
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this is beautiful! I love the simplicity & depth at the same time
Hope Udarbe said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 4:35 pm
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how freakin sad
WerewolfWriting BRONZE said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 4:18 pm
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Intense and indepth. :)
kooky mary said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 11:10 am

i love how u talk about the ones that pop before they r launched because there are babies that die in the womb but also the ones that float quitely and become great things

keep writing

Fran94 said...
on Jan. 17 2011 at 2:17 pm
I really like your poem! It is very insightful and relates to life very much. I don't think I would have ever come up with what you came up with that would relate to life and God. I hope I made sense!
Schoolrulesonoccations GOLD said...
on Jan. 9 2011 at 11:07 pm
Schoolrulesonoccations GOLD, Port Orchard, Washington
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This is an amazing poem. I think that they way you used bubbles to represent miricales. Great work
RozaB SILVER said...
on Jan. 9 2011 at 9:40 pm
RozaB SILVER, Milpitas, California
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You are very insightful. Nice piece of work.