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Another Metaphor of Life MAG

October 14, 2008
By Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.


The author's comments:
I happened to be blowing bubbles in my room when my thoughts suddenly took a semi-philosophical turn and came up with this metaphor. I liked the idea immediately, if only because it was both lighthearted and yet potentially cynical (in pointing out that a person's life, no matter how long his/her "imprint" lasts, will fade away eventually).

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on Mar. 29 2010 at 2:47 pm
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
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I love the way you put the word "pop" on a separate line, and the overall poem was just phenominal. I love that way of thinking; that whole philosophy just about summs everything up.

on Mar. 29 2010 at 2:01 pm
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

Wow, this is really cool, I've never looked at life this way before! An interesting style for sure and definetly a 5/5

on Mar. 29 2010 at 4:39 am
xAllegria BRONZE, Singapore, Other
1 article 2 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
Ça fait tellement du bien d’aimer les gens qu’on aime, que ça finit par faire mal. Je sais pas comment on survit a ça. Non franchement, je sais pas. LOL (laughing out loud) ®, Lola.

.Wow... i'd thought of this before!! TELEPATHYY!! :D But i guess that makes it truer. :)

on Mar. 28 2010 at 10:54 pm
Taylor-pop SILVER, Mole Creek, Other
5 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Real friends are like diamonds true and rare.
Fake friends are like autumn leaves found everywhere.

I love your writting its so true and it makes you think all about life and why things happen good job! x keep up the good work.

on Mar. 19 2010 at 3:20 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
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apart from the blasphemy in the beginning...

this Was just ........ so....

intricate...

on Mar. 7 2010 at 7:53 pm
little-miss-mistakes GOLD, Plano, Texas
18 articles 2 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
even after all these years the sun has never said to the earth, you owe me... look at what a love like that can do, it can light up the sky

omg!! i wish i had your skills! this is absolutely amazing!i love the simplicity and repitition. keep righting this is amazing

on Mar. 7 2010 at 6:09 pm
JackieSutton BRONZE, Brownsburg, Indiana
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I love the originality and uniqueness of this piece. The repetition isn't forced or cheesy at all, you did really well with that. good luck & keep up the awesome work!! :)

Lonleydandy said...
on Mar. 7 2010 at 6:00 pm
Love it :D

on Mar. 7 2010 at 3:41 pm
skywitch BRONZE, Salem, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
~ A person is smart. People are dumb, panicky, dangerous animals, and you know it.~ Agent K
Men In Black

I love your poem!

on Feb. 13 2010 at 3:14 pm
the_Horsegirl SILVER, Minneapolis, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
People need dreams, there's as much nourishment in 'em as food.
--Dorothy Gilman

If there is such a thing as truth, it is as intricate and hidden as a crown of feathers.
--Isaac Bashevis Singer

Wow, this is really good. Really original. I especially liked the first stanza and the repititon of the word "pop".

Please read my work if you get the chance. I'd appreciate any comments you have!

on Jan. 24 2010 at 3:16 pm
earthy_kat GOLD, Sebree, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"My heart has joined the Thousand, for my friend stopped running today." - Hazel from the book Watership Down (by Richard Adams).

A very interesting poem.Keep up the good work! (:

on Jan. 22 2010 at 10:40 pm
Hope-in-life PLATINUM, Hutto, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"too many of us stay walled up because we are afraid of being hurt.we are afraid to care too much for fear that the other person doesn't care at all "

Its beautiful and insight full , refreshing and exactly what every one in this world needs to remember in order to wake up a little.

on Jan. 22 2010 at 8:39 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

This is good. I really enjoyed it. Keep writing. Check out my stuff, let me know if it's awful or not.

on Jan. 22 2010 at 8:23 pm
falling-rain GOLD, Layton, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Getr done!
larry the cable guy

i loved this poem.i liked the way you were able to put god into the spot of a little kid. it made sense from the beggining and i totally got it. like i said before, i loved this peice. keep writing and let me know about more work like this! :)

Tara(: BRONZE said...
on Jan. 22 2010 at 4:39 pm
Tara(: BRONZE, Princeton, New Jersey
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so great! love the metaphor please check out my work :)

matthewZ said...
on Jan. 4 2010 at 8:00 pm
nice! check out my poem too! rate+comment plz! http ://www.teenink .com /poetry/free_verse/article/156195/Airplanes/ thanks!

Andrnick said...
on Dec. 9 2009 at 9:55 pm
This Poem isn't really that great because there's religions out there that have different meanings but for the life part it is very good in figuartive laungage.

Believe me, I'm a fan of figuartive laungage, it makes me write better and more understanding for the other readers that read my work.

Yoodle15 said...
on Dec. 9 2009 at 1:58 am
Perfect metaphor for life; so ephemeral it is that our bubble may go pop at any moment! =) 5 stars <3

on Nov. 17 2009 at 7:37 pm
Hisa-Ai PLATINUM, Rockford, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Even the bravest of soldiers recognizes a battle he cannot win.

Huh...

That's very interesting...

on Nov. 17 2009 at 5:28 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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This is poem is so beautiful. It's like the words came to life. The image you expressed was clearly put into my head. Now that's talent. I really enjoy this.