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Another Metaphor of Life MAG

October 14, 2008
By Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
Adams1030 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
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bubbles.
god’s just a little kid
with a big bottle
of Miracle Bubbles
and a wand
dipping, blowing these
bubbles
all doomed to

pop

at one point or another.
they either drop
too fast, before
he can catch them,
or the biggest ones
pop!
before they’ve even
been launched.
it’s the little ones
that leave quietly
and take their time

gently

drifting

down

everyone leaves a mark,
you know,
but sooner or later
they’ve all evaporated.


The author's comments:
I happened to be blowing bubbles in my room when my thoughts suddenly took a semi-philosophical turn and came up with this metaphor. I liked the idea immediately, if only because it was both lighthearted and yet potentially cynical (in pointing out that a person's life, no matter how long his/her "imprint" lasts, will fade away eventually).

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on Apr. 29 2011 at 1:14 pm
Paul Troost BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
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I love bubbles. I also like people. This is very fun and cool metaphor, I also really like how you showed the reader gently gently drifting down. A very good poem, nice work

on Apr. 29 2011 at 12:04 pm
TaylorMarie BRONZE, Roscoe, Illinois
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This is honestly a great metaphor..so deep! Love it!!

KitKate BRONZE said...
on Apr. 29 2011 at 10:35 am
KitKate BRONZE, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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I really like your poem. I like bubbles:) great metaphor.

Dillinger123 said...
on Apr. 29 2011 at 10:24 am
Lovely poem. I especially liked how the text appeared as though it were a bubble floating down the page.

on Apr. 29 2011 at 8:35 am
jacob26950 BRONZE, Wyoming, Michigan
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i like how the format of it made it seem like it was actualy a bubble drifting across the page. great poem. it reminded me of my childhood playing with bubbles for hours upon hours

on Apr. 29 2011 at 8:34 am
Loriel Jenny BRONZE, Wyoming, Michigan
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very cute poem!(:  i loved the meaning and how you came up with it was really cool:)

IRUEHL SILVER said...
on Apr. 28 2011 at 3:38 pm
IRUEHL SILVER, Deland, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Those who start wars, never fight them
And those who fight wars, they never like them
And those who write laws, can recite them
And those who fight laws, they live and die by them

Beautiful! i really liked it!

Echinacea1 said...
on Apr. 7 2011 at 2:30 pm

I immediately loved the way you kept the style simplistic in the intro, it fit perfectly with the theme. But my favorite part was the end starting with "it’s the little ones/that leave quietly" for some reason this part was very poignant. I also thought how you made a break in the flow of the poem for he last stanzas ("everyone...all evaporated") was a wonderful idea, especially as I always have trouble with doing that myself.

Just for a little critic, the one line that seemed off was "or the biggest ones pop!" I would put a different description instead of pop here, it was hard to read.  Good Job!


Mc'Blacky said...
on Apr. 7 2011 at 11:58 am

You are right :)

We are more important that a bubble


Govna'12 said...
on Apr. 7 2011 at 10:25 am

Amazing, Metaphor(:

i loved it! so beautiful(:

love, Govna'


on Mar. 16 2011 at 5:39 pm
Ms.Understood, Laramie, Wyoming
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This was such a great metaphor to use. I would have never thought of something so creative. It fits perfectly with the point you're trying to get across. Amazing! Loved it!

on Mar. 16 2011 at 3:23 pm
ripvansprinkle, West Chester, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Smash the mirrors but avoid the pieces." - B. McNally

Truly brilliant!  LOVE THIS! :P

on Mar. 16 2011 at 10:41 am
to.hold.the.sun SILVER, Maryville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"You spend your whole life stuck in the labyrinth, thinking about how you'll escape it one day, and how awesome it will be, and imagining that future keeps you going, but you never do it. You just use the future to escape the present." -John Green

This is amazing. Seriously. It gave me goosebumps. What a great metaphor!

Mari said...
on Mar. 16 2011 at 10:12 am
Oh shut up & just enjoy the poem!

Meg15 said...
on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:22 am
I think it sounds pretty good:)

on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:20 am
This is not a place for play .. !! GET OFF!. :)

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on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:18 am
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on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:17 am
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on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:16 am
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on Feb. 25 2011 at 9:02 am
ImBetterThanYou, Marshalltown, Iowa
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I like this peom


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