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it's strange because i never liked the color
brown, but as i gaze into your eyes, i can't help but fall irrevocably
in love with the creamy, smooth, rich color
of mocha coffee, and i hesitate in
turning away
from you, because i don't know
if i can function completely without
the caffeine that is your eyes

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_Zavery_This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 20, 2014 at 1:43 pm
The last line is especially powerful and moving, good work!
 
BeanzoinalinThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jun. 4, 2014 at 2:07 pm
That last line is so moving... You are a really good writer!
 
MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 29, 2013 at 5:36 pm
I'm hating this site right now. Until today after months, I finally saw that you had posted in my forum requesting feedback. So sorry that your post didn't appear at first. For this poem being your first piece, I must say that it's incredible. I love the concept of it. As a brown-eyed person, I couldn't agree anymore. I love how you detailed the eyes of this lover. You didn't just say yeah you got great eyes. You went into lyrical details showing why this person's eyes ar... (more »)
 
rachelmuschett This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2013 at 9:38 pm
Really paints a picture! Love the poem and the way in which you described the eyes and its color in such a little bit amount of words! 4/5.
 
Avery_S said...
Jul. 9, 2013 at 6:44 pm
Beautiful poem! Completely warms my soul.
 
frnbanan56 said...
Jul. 9, 2013 at 6:33 pm
I love it so much! I hope you get a lot of stars and comments :)
 
hazeleyes8 said...
Jul. 8, 2013 at 4:31 pm
wow this is beautiful!
 
Maya said...
Jul. 8, 2013 at 4:02 pm
Beautiful poem! Xoxo
 
laurennnnn said...
Jul. 8, 2013 at 3:58 pm
this is amazing :')
 
TheShainTrain said...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 3:10 pm
Oh my gosh, this is so amazing. I want this painted on my bedroom wall. Good work.
 
Willowin said...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 5:40 am
Wow, that was beautiful!!
 
ielderkin339 said...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 5:26 am
Love this!
 
tumblrgal said...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 3:58 am
this is beautiful. 
 
lethargicology said...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 3:04 am
This poem is beautifully written. It's a simple pleasure that puts looking into the eyes of someone you like into words. Good job!
 
leah said...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 2:51 am
i really think this is beautiful x
 
hula said...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 6:31 pm
you are the best<3 ily
 
nooo00oo0o0o said...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 3:42 pm
<3 <3 love this so much, its fantastic. 
 
asfsjdhfkjsdhf said...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 3:27 pm
Love this. Great poem and author! Great Job!
 
desolait said...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 3:26 pm
This poem is just so great, totally in love with it
 
kaity said...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 2:20 am
Aww what a sweet poem! I love how you compared brown eyes to mocha coffee, that's just great! :)
 
destinybree13 said...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 2:10 am
I love this omg
 
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