And If ...

June 27, 2013
By Anonymous

if three words could make you understand
then i would have already said them
if one touch could make you see me now
then i would have already touched you
and if one scream could show you fear
then i would have screamed by now.

silent promises that fade to dust, should of never been made
broken hearts all lining up, should of never been
tears falling from scarred eyes, should be smiling instead.


if a hundred gifts could make it okay
then i would have already taken one
if one kiss could make me forget all
then i would have already kissed back
and if two shakes could wake me up somehow
then i would of already been up.

silent promises that fade to dust, should of never been made
broken hearts all lining up, should of never been
tears falling from scarred eyes, should be smiling instead.



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on Jul. 8 2013 at 11:08 pm
loveisntreal GOLD, Arcata, California
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Favorite Quote:
"you live what you've learned." -linkin park

thanks for the advice, im really bad at seeing grammatical errors lol.

on Jul. 2 2013 at 7:34 pm
UniquePerspective SILVER, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"The most pathetic thing in the world is to see, and yet have no vision." - Hellen Keller
“Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.” - Dr. Seuss (Theodore Giesel)

Some grammatical errors but I love the vivid emotion.

on Jul. 2 2013 at 1:47 pm
TheSortingHat SILVER, Waukee, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"I want to be a Renaissance woman. I want to paint, and I want to write, and I want to act, and I want to just do everything." --Emma Watson

I think it's a really good poem.  I love the phrase "silent promises that fade to dust".  Grammatically, however,  there are several instances where you use "of" when you should have used "have".  For example, "should of never been made" should be "should have never been made".  I think you were thinking of the contraction "should've", which is pronounced similarly to "should of", but it is a contraction for "should have".

on Jul. 1 2013 at 6:39 pm
SongBird14 GOLD, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
It’s human nature to start taking things for granted again when danger isn’t banging loudly on the door.” – David Hackworth

I love that you have created a solid and vibrent picture in my head. even if it may be painful and one that hurts to look at, it is one I am thanful to have seen. i love the way you broke up your stanzas and repeted what was nessary it reallly made it all the more powerful.


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