To Follow My Life

June 3, 2013
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In the dark of night,
I went to find you.
No one know,
That I loved you.
I came to your house,
And gave myself entry.
What I found,
Was not you.
What I found was the scene of a murder.

I found you lying,
There on the kitchen floor.
The murder weapon,
Was clearly the knife forced into your chest.
Your phone was lying,
Next to you,
91 were the numbers on the screen.

I stepped forward,
And gingerly removed the phone,
From the spreading pool of blood.
I added a 1,
And called the police.
When they came,
I let them in.
They looked at your body,
They looked at the knife.
I told them all I knew of you.

I told them of a sad child,
With raven-black hair,
And blue eyes.
With a rare smile,
And an even rarer laugh,
Both of which could lift away any darkness.
I told them of a young woman,
Who was kinder than any,
And was brave enough to face,
Any challenge the world would give her.

I told the police,
About how I found you,
Lying on the ground.
With your phone beside you,
In a pool of your spreading blood.

What I never told the police,
Was that I would find your killer,
And that I would kill him.

It took me a week,
Before I realized two things;
Who the killer was,
And also,
That my life died with you.
One week and one day after your death,
I drove my car,
And slammed into his,
On the Golden Gate Bridge.
The killer’s car went over the side,
And I opened my door.
I heard police sirens wailing,
And I choose for my body,
To follow my life.
And I walked into my car,
And rove off the bridge,
To allow my body to follow my life.

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BalladOfMonaLisa said...
Aug. 3, 2013 at 11:46 am
Wow... I wish I could write like this XD You developed this very well... I love it. Besides a couple grammatical errors, this was perfect!
chloena_garrett said...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 10:17 am
I read this for the first time in the contest section! I loved it so much, I had to find it on your page and favorite it. I love the way the poem has a way of sucking you in, making you feel the emotion for yourself. I got chills :D   5/5 for sure!
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 26, 2013 at 5:06 pm
Thanks, Chloe!  
Laugh-it-Out This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 17, 2013 at 10:01 am
This, Andy, is amazing. I feel like there is nothing to say this is so perfect. Your descriptions of the murder scene were amazing and i loved every second of the suspense and longing. This was truly wonderful. The end, my god, i can not even put into words how amazing it was. This is definitly my favorite piece by you. Have a wonderful day,keep writing the valley of the dolls unless it is done, and keep rockin
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 17, 2013 at 10:43 am
Thanks, Liv!!!
Laugh-it-Out This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 12, 2013 at 9:35 pm
Hey, not sure if you still exist on this sight, but i apologize for disappearing.. I really miss you so if you still get on, DONT HESITATE when replying to me :) love ya andy       ~liv btw ur not mad right??
Krasota This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 11, 2013 at 5:56 pm
I love how you included the bit about the 91 already being dialed. Usually when you're writing a murder scene, you forget to include the small details like that. Excellent job with the whole idea! :D
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 11, 2013 at 6:25 pm
THank you, Kras!
SongBird04 said...
Jun. 11, 2013 at 3:27 pm
Ahh! Yay! I love this! This is my favorite one so far, keep it up! Goood job! if you wanna check out my new one "Don;t tell me this when you're doing that"  it would be nice! only if you wnat to though. :)  Anyways, great job! I like the mysterious chillingness to it!
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 11, 2013 at 3:29 pm
Thank you, SongBird!!
Jade.I.Am This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 10, 2013 at 10:42 pm
This is so sad and tragic, you can't help but love it. Nice job, the imagery is stunning :)
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 10, 2013 at 10:43 pm
Thank you, Jade!
LexusMarie said...
Jun. 10, 2013 at 2:39 pm
Thank you, Andy, for writing such an amazing poem! I love this poem. This has become my newest favorite by you. I love everything about it, the mystery, the love, the length, the story in general. This is wonderful. The attention to detail is so specific. And the way you include the suspense is wonderful. I LOVE THIS POEM. The ending is wicked. BRAVO TO YOU. *clap* *clap*
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 10, 2013 at 5:47 pm
Thank you, Lexus!!!
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