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Good Morning

April 20, 2013
By Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou


There is something crisp
about this morning
with an azure
clouded-dappled sky
and a honeyed haze.

There is something sweet
about this morning:
the vase of violet orchids
that sits on our nightstand
are fresh and fragrant as
the day last week
when you brought them home
coming back from work.

There is something provocative
about this morning
with the only thing covering
our bodies
are these thin
cool cotton sheets so sheer
that the outlines
of both you and me
must be visible:
our warmth trapped beneath.
You roll over,
thinking I’m asleep,
and get out of bed
without bothering to put on your crumpled clothes,
lying on the floor next to mine,
or without covering your torso
with some sheets.
You bare backside recedes
from my view
as you go out to the kitchen
to brew our coffee.

There is something euphonic
about this morning,
as you get back in bed,
and your voice
is the first sound
to bid me, “Good morning,”
while our steaming coffee
brews in the background,
its guttural song
making it all the way
into our bedroom.
There is something promising
about this morning
with your smile greeting me,
your cheeks dimpling,
letting me know
that I still have
one more day
with you
today.


The author's comments:
I began to develop the idea of this poem in a afternoon. But I decided to wait until the nest morning to write in order for it to have a raw feeling. And this was what I came up with. I have to give MyApocolyptic for being some inspiration for me. Hope you all enjoy.

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HammadWaseem said...
on May. 22 2013 at 6:07 pm
HammadWaseem, Lahore, Other
0 articles 5 photos 286 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be proud of who you are.
-Eminem

You can't see me
-John Cena

Ooh, somebody stop me!
-Mask

awesome!! good job!

on May. 22 2013 at 6:07 pm
Flowers_Will_Grow SILVER, Annandale, Virginia
8 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A little fall of rain, can hardly hurt me now."-Little Fall of Rain from Les Miserables
"Rain will make the flowers grow."-Little Fall of Rain from Les Miserables
"We'll carry on"-Welcome to the Black Parade from My Chemical Romance

The poem seemed very...peaceful if you will xD  It makes morning seem like a good thing xD

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 21 2013 at 3:47 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you so much. So kind. And you too. Always write on! 

on May. 20 2013 at 9:25 pm
Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather hate you for everything you are. Than ever love you for something you are not. " FFDP "You're born alone and you die alone" FFDP "I wonder out where you can't see, inside my shell I wait and bleed." Slipknot " If youre 555 then I am 666"

Great use of alliteration here: "cool cotton sheets so sheer" this poem flowed very well. Everything including format was very well done! Amazing job! You have great talents to write, write on!

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 20 2013 at 1:38 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Yes, thank you, Jetta, for catching that. When I wrote by hand, it was supposed to be in a different stanza all by itself. Somehow, I hunno, I messed up when I typed it. But you are correct on that. Thank you for commenting on this poem and for demonstrating such LOVE for this poem. I'm so touched. Thank you. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 20 2013 at 1:31 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you, MaybeImCrazyButIThinkILovedYou. Wow, that's a mouthful. But I love that username. Thanks for the comment. It's means so much to me—THE WORLD! I know I say that a lot to like almost everyone but it's immensely TRUE. Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!  

KylieK GOLD said...
on May. 20 2013 at 9:19 am
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
11 articles 0 photos 270 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

Well, my hat comes off to you! Bravo!   Love the contruction, the imagery, the diction, and everything about this! Very deep... Very raw, very... Well, poetic!

on May. 19 2013 at 4:59 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Such a good idea! I really LOVE the format, and honestly, I'm thoroughly impressed overall. I love the rawness of it - you weren't afraid to show your true, exposed feelings in it. Make sure your stanzas are right; in the last stanza, "There is something promising" should go on another following stanza. Otherwise, I honestly don't have any critiques. Very well-written. You are so talented.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 17 2013 at 1:35 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you. You just made my day too. Does that mean we're even? But who ever said anything about being even? HAHA. Thanks so much, Gwen_Elizabeth. 

on May. 16 2013 at 8:22 pm
Gwen_Elizabeth BRONZE, Fishers, Indiana
2 articles 24 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I like nonsense, it wakes up the brain cells. Fantasy is a necessary ingredient in living.”
-Dr. Seuss

very nice imagery! veeery gooood :D  

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 7:41 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks so much. Love the name by the way. Mangos are so tasty. And rainbows are cool. Especially, if they're double rainbows. ^u^ Thanks.

on May. 15 2013 at 7:32 pm
Rainbowmangos BRONZE, Austin, Texas
1 article 0 photos 2 comments
Awesome! I could visualize everything.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 7:16 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks so much, Ali101. You too! Keep writing.

Reese18 SILVER said...
on May. 15 2013 at 7:05 pm
Reese18 SILVER, Redford, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
that's totally awesome

Wow that was absolutley amazing. I love that! keep up the great work!

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 7:03 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks so much for your comments. And thanks for loving it. ^u^

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 14 2013 at 2:31 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Ah, yes. Now I remember you. Thanks.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 12 2013 at 10:48 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Lauren ,Lauren, Lauren. It seems to me that we haven't spoken in such a long time, not that we really chatted a lot before. But I remeber well reading your work. I see you have new work. I'm excited to go read it soon. I will, promise. Thanks so much for reading this poem. And the second stsnza is a special one to me. It may seem off topic to the whole poem or insignificant compared to the rest. But it contains that part that describes the treasuring if the little things in a relationship that mean so much to those two people, yet insignificant to everyone else. Thank you for appreciating the little but important parts to this poem.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 12 2013 at 10:43 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you so much, Chicot123. I like your username not to be off topic. Haha. ^u^ Thanks.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 12 2013 at 10:41 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

THANK YOU. WOW! I never expected someone to feel as though he or she were the character of one of my poems. That is more than I could ever want as a writer. Thank you for making my day in such a grand way.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 12 2013 at 10:38 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks so much, Valery. I will read one of your poems as I promised. Sorry, it took so long to reply. Thank you.