I Take Back My Tears MAG

September 5, 2008
By Lilyan Howard BRONZE, Tallahasee, Florida
Lilyan Howard BRONZE, Tallahasee, Florida
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I take back my tears
the wasted years
I spent crying
for what never could happen

I take back my heart
my shattered heart
Up off the ground
and back in my arms

I take back my hope
wasted on you
and toss it aside
for it has no meaning now

Nothing you say
no words
no songs
can heal the bleeding wound
That you opened again and again

I walk a free woman
held by nothing of yours
and fly away free
as free as the wind



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on Jan. 6 2016 at 2:09 pm
Love_Live_Write BRONZE, Kennett Square, Pennsylvania
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I really like the repetition used! It really drilled in the point as well as her decision!

Randz said...
on Jan. 6 2016 at 7:21 am
Randz, Morisset, Illinois
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That was so good!

Tamie GOLD said...
on Nov. 23 2015 at 6:59 pm
Tamie GOLD, Sonora, California
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Favorite Quote:
"if you can be anyone just be you unless you could be Buffy Summers then be Buffy Summers"

I love that!!!!!

on Nov. 23 2015 at 2:16 pm
LittleRedDeliriousPrince SILVER, Parma Heights, Ohio
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This is amazing!

on May. 27 2015 at 3:12 am
Iamwhoiam17 GOLD, Lake City Fl, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Just be yourself,if you are happy that's all that matter's.

That is great!! Please check out my poem and like it please!: TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/709809/MeWho-i-want-to-be/

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on Feb. 25 2015 at 6:45 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Wow, 23 pages of comments, going on 24... amazing! I LOVE this poem. You present the perfect feel and tone, and also the rhythm is melodious and continues to the feel. Great job, you`re a natural.:)

on Feb. 22 2015 at 2:19 pm
Angelbaby BRONZE, Norway , Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
'Don't judge a book by its cover'

This poem has so much meaning to I love it!!!!!!! fantastic work @

on Oct. 16 2012 at 10:38 pm
Ashelyn Pindell BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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Sorry that was meant to be its own seperate comment not a reply.  

on Oct. 16 2012 at 10:34 pm
Ashelyn Pindell BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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I have one word to describe this poem and that is cliche."I take back my tears -- the wasted years". This poem is clearly about a person taking back all the heartache they wasted on another person. But my question for you is this: how many times in how many poems, movies, books, songs, etc. have you heard this same sentiment repeated? This poem would perhaps be a bit more interesting if you had somehow found a different more thought provoking way to convey your meaning. The imagery was also very cliche. Again how many times have you heard "shattered heart" or "bleeding wound"? My main advice for you would be to find some originality. And I'm confused. The last two stanzas in relation to eachother make no sense. In the second to last stanza you say that this person left you with a "bleeding wound" that can never be healed. Then, in the last stanza you claim that the person has no affect on you "I walk a free woman held by nothing of yours" Wouldn't you be "held" by the never healing "wound" that person left on you? All in all I have to say that this poem needs revision...badly.  

Yaya21 GOLD said...
on Oct. 16 2012 at 5:36 pm
Yaya21 GOLD, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
love and death what it is dont stop in fear, love yall ba, leave please, danger is reality, dont controll the feelin then y keep having it. hurt and pain is all part of life. life is too short to waste. believe what u believe in. love is a passion

I started reading this and ii didnt want it to stop! i can really related to this!! this is amazing! great work!!! 

on Oct. 16 2012 at 2:32 pm
DemetriaSH BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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I believe that I must start by saying that your effort  towards writing a successful poem that evoked emotion was average. As the reader read through the poem, it was quite clear that the character was hurt. Although you made this obvious, other confusing components worked agaisnt you. In the first staza you stated "I take back my tears the wasted years I spent crying for what never could happen". I'm unclear as to what didn't happen and why she is all of a sudden taking back her tears? Why is she crying? Why should the reader feel emotion towards her crying and her situation? You proceded to tell the reader that the character's heart had been shattered and that she was picking it up off of the ground. Your metaphor here was okay but again, what is the situation at hand? What point are you trying to get across to the reader? Your third stanza seemed to be out of place with the rest of the poem. The character has seemed to have moved on and she does have a sense of anger and regret but would she toss her hope aside? Has the character really reached the point of completly giving up? The flow of the poem should be more developed so that the reader has the full picture. The fourth stanza states that the character had been hurt repeatedly. This piece of the poem does bring about a sense of sympathy and plays on the readers own emotions, experiences, current situations, etc. This is a strong element in your poem. Your final stanza seemed to have a "bow tie" ending. Not to say that there is anything wrong with a happy ending but maybe a different ending would be more relatable and effective. Over all, the concept was believable and realistic. The poem needs more development and revision. Rework. 

on Oct. 9 2012 at 6:16 pm
KiraVogt2896 SILVER, La Canada Flintridge, California
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Favorite Quote:
'Our love is like the wind... I can’t see it, but I sure can feel it.' By Landon, A Walk To Remember. Movie and book.

Good job on your poem! I loved it! :)

on Oct. 9 2012 at 5:03 pm
justliveyourlife02 BRONZE, Mahopac, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Just hang on tight and enjoy the rollercoaster that is life.

I couldn't agree more.

on Oct. 9 2012 at 10:24 am
Music-Maniac1498 BRONZE, Spencerville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
If Love isn't a game then why are their so many players?

I disagree with @abcd. I really like this poem. Many people can relate to it. The only reason it is "hackneyed" (or whatever the word is) is because many people go through this exact thing. You did an excellent job on this poem. Not many girls see that you don't need a man to feel good about yourself and that is eactly what you're saying in this poem! Ladies, be strong!!

on Oct. 7 2012 at 8:33 pm
Zithia PLATINUM, Cambridge, Massachusetts
27 articles 16 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It makes no difference who or what you are, old or young, black or white, pagan, Jew, or Christian, I want to love you all and be loved by you all, and I mean to have your love." -Victoria Woodhull

This is pefect up until the last line which is a cliche.  The rest of it is so strong, though.  Create a last line that lives up to, or even exceeds, the rest of the poem.

on Sep. 17 2012 at 6:05 pm
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

I agree with abcd.

on Sep. 17 2012 at 4:02 am
BlueSunset BRONZE, Barcelona, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind"- Dr. Seuss

Lovely piece of work, simple yet effective ;) xx keep it up :D

on Sep. 14 2012 at 11:49 am
EstherSophia BRONZE, Saint Cloud, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything has it's beauty, but not everyone sees it."

Loved it :) Very simple yet beautiful. I can relate. I went through something exactly like this recently and I feel the same way.

abcd said...
on Aug. 27 2012 at 9:34 am
Hackneyed means repeated to the point that it loses its meaning. A better word for me to have used would be cliched. Angsty just means full of angst, which is like anger and sadness mixed together. People normally say "angst" if the emotion was overly dramatic.

. said...
on Aug. 26 2012 at 9:41 pm
Great work - really enjoyed it.


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