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I try to realize,
Where the tenderness of love was discovered,
As I felt this tenderness 1st in this body,


When I kissed my lover's lips
The moment was majestic,

Her eyes were truly romantic with red
I wanted to feel it again,

Though kept it for tomorrow
Cause I saw my lover,


Still intensely immersed in a new tenderness
Its hard to explain, but so easy to sustain
I was in a deep agony,


As I wanted to have it again
I didn’t say about it to my soul mate

Knowing then a deep shyness she will strongly restrain
This the 1st part of love,


You can see the shyness above
Then tomorrow comes, we kissed then again
I felt a new deep tenderness,


I realized this is called romance
I don’t know I fell in this substance,
As the feelings are different & im absorbed in the tenderness

The effect is love, love never cant be enough




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AugustSummerFlingThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 2:21 am:
Hi there :) that was a sweet poem :) your usage of '1st' instead of first made the poem a bit awkward. The meaning is still the same but it's visually out of place in the poem.
 
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MMOONThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 2:09 am:
Beautiful. I really enjoyed it. Keep writing!  
 
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LiraDaerisThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 19 at 1:25 am:
A very nice one. Though you have some grammatical mistakes that trip it up. Smooth those over, and it will enhance the poem. I like how the tenderness doesn't end up really being her body but your connection to her- how you care for her. Good job.
 
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All-I-Do-Is-Cut-JRThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 16 at 4:52 am:
I like how much feeling you put in this poem i think you did a great job! :)
 
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LivelyJadeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 15 at 1:10 pm:
Really mushy XD I like it! :)
 
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SunnyluvsworldhugsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 15 at 11:21 am:
i luv keep writing like :)
 
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