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Angel In Blood

There she lay before me,
So stunning, so still
Her skin so soft, so pure
Covered in blood.

Her blue eyes wide open,
Dried tears ran along her temples,
Her dress as white as snow,
But covered in blood.
Broken chandeliers,
Broken glass
Her giant, dark wings,
Wide open, imprinting
The white marble floor
All in blood.

She fought her Brothers
She fought her Sisters,
That beautiful Angel,
That divine Angel
Ending her Eternal life,
She lay before me,
She was dressed in blood.
Her smooth, golden hair,
Covered her alluring face
There she lay before me,
She died, with her hair dyed
In blood.

And there she lay before me,
The beautiful Angel,
The divine Angel,
The Angel in blood




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FallenoutofgraceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 6:43 am:
You do not suck at poetry full honest truth is that i loved it <3
 
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AlwaysDepressed-JR-This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 14 at 5:41 am:
<3  
 
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CherryPieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 4 at 11:17 am:
and you say you suck at poetry. seriously girl, i'm jealous of your skills...!!!
 
cookiemonster24This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 5 at 3:16 am :
:O Puh-leez! Yours is way better! You can critisize it if you want to. I mean it.
 
CherryPieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 14 at 12:27 am :
you can deny it all you want.
 
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melxoxo said...
Feb. 25 at 12:58 pm:
i really enjoyed this poem, to make it sound more like poetry try a few more poetic devices this can be really effective but well done
 
cookiemonster24This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 5 at 3:14 am :
Yeah :) Thanks for the comment. I'll try harder :)
 
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Sparkle1popsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 16 at 1:39 pm:
This is very good, the repetioton of blood is wonderful.
 
cookiemonster24This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 17 at 12:50 am :
Nahh, I'm sure its not THAT good, but its my first try, so thank you very much :)
 
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Armyj13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 5 at 1:36 pm:
This is a beautiful poem. Just like you best friend!!
 
cookiemonster24This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 6 at 5:47 am :
Lol, thanks so much, Army :D ... Well, you could tell me where it sounded awkward.
 
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