Feeling Running

January 26, 2013
By Taylor Scarafile BRONZE, Clifton Park, New York
Taylor Scarafile BRONZE, Clifton Park, New York
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Standing in a crowd;
A lot of people.
I hear the shot,
My heart jumps.
My heart is pounding.
Waiting for the crowd to move.
Standing on my toes,
Watching the elites sprint off.
The crowd starts moving,
Breathing heavily.
Moving feet,
Sounds like a stampede.
Left, right,
Left, right…
Then, the ground rises underneath me.
An uphill.
It seems to be never ending.
Lifting my legs feels like lifting a ton.
My legs feel like fire.
Going downhill.
The wind blows on my hot face.
It’s cool.
I’m passing people.
Running so fast,
My legs can’t keep up.
Running so fast,
I can take off and fly.
It gets hotter.
The sun beats down on my face.
It’s humid.
Squinting from the sun,
The sweat that drips down my face.
This is dreadful…
I see a blurry sign.
It starts to clear up.
It reads,
Mile 3
Only a tenth of a mile left!
The dreadful torture,
Has lasted a long time,
But the race is almost over…
My last bit of energy,
I push my burning legs.
Like a machine,
I power up.
I feel nothing,
No pain.
There is determination.
I pass people,
Drooling all over their red faces.
I see the banner:
I run to the beat of my racing heart.
I see people cheer for me,
But I can’t hear them.
I feel the thick cord under my foot.
I have finished.
My head spins.
A person hands me water.
I drink through my gasps for air.
The sound comes back to me.
I hear music, clapping, cheering.
I smile.
I feel amazing.
I watch others pass the finish line.
Feeling like a winner,
Even though I’m far from it compared to the top tree.
It’s only eight in the morning,
Some people are still sleeping.
I’m a winner.
I already accomplished something.
Feeling running.

The author's comments:
I have run many 5k races. Being in the middle of a crowd people with ambition is inspiring.

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This article has 3 comments.

on Feb. 2 2013 at 12:53 am
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
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I have run 4 5k's, but I have been to many cuz my family is a runner family. This feeling is the EDACT one I get at the start of the race! I'm not the winner at all, but at the end when you burn and feel like your feet aren't touching the ground is the true feeling. You DO feel like a winner. & yes a lot of people are still sleeping haha!

on Jan. 30 2013 at 9:58 pm
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
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Favorite Quote:
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.

You are only as strong as your weakest link.

Good job! Although, I think the transitions between some parts could be smoother - it seemed to jump around quite a bit. But I love it! :)

on Jan. 30 2013 at 7:01 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 861 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

THe title is a little bit confusing, but this was a great poem otherwise! If there was one thing I would recommend, it would be to include more poetic elements in your writing style. Amazing job!


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