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This passion is trying
to ignite.
It's flickering like
my dying sight.
The rainfall starts out
kind of frail.
Showering
the nightingale.
Both delicate like
white eyelet lace.
Yet strong like my savior's
saving grace.
It can't be captured
like butterflies.
Though sometimes weak,
it never dies.




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thatunknownthingThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 18 at 3:16 am:
Such a beautiful poem, with amazing lines, and a delicate rhyme. I have the same faith as you...in nature! :) so, relatable.  again, awesomely written. 5/5!! (i never give that to ANYONE!)
 
RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 18 at 9:48 am :
Well then thank you VERY much, lol. I never capitalize my thanks:)
 
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StarlitSunriseThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 16 at 12:29 pm:
  Alright, I am going to try not to waste too much of your time with long comments. :P So here I will be brief and just say that “It’s flickering like my dying sight.” was a truly beautiful little phrase.
 
RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 16 at 1:16 pm :
Thank you! And you wouldn't be wasting my time:)
 
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SaphiraBrightscalesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 13 at 2:15 pm:
faith....Kinda like hope and belief...I wrote something like that a long time ago..this is much more amazing though..Though the first line wan't that impressive....It's a nice poem...plus I'm happy to read it, the fact that "it never dies"  :D
 
RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 13 at 6:38 pm :
Haha, thank you. Could you tell me why the first line wasn't great though? I would really appreciate it, since I want to improve my writing:)
 
SaphiraBrightscalesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 14 at 10:20 pm :
Because it didn't have that element you know..I've found it in the rest of your poems , the first line always pulls the reader in..this first line was similar to many others (from other not-so-good poems) I've read before plus it wasn't too suited to the title...That's what I think... but really there's "feeling" in this poem and that's what I love about it..
 
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RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 1 at 5:01 pm:
Thank you :)
 
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bethanyebethany said...
Feb. 1 at 12:39 pm:
I love this!! It's really beautiful.
 
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