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November 15, 2012
By BreeChase BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
BreeChase BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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COVER YOURSELF LESS GIRL.
RUN IN THE TALL RED PRADA HEELS YOUR
DADDY BOUGHT YOU,
JUST SO YOU CAN HIDE THE BLEMISHES
YOU FIND INSIDE.
UNRAVEL YOUR EMOTIONS,
JUST TO CONCEAL THEM WITH FOUNDATION.



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on Nov. 28 2012 at 2:51 pm
BreeChase BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Thank you guys! :-)

on Nov. 28 2012 at 2:46 pm
CorySchoonover BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"You miss 100% of the oppurtunities you don't take"
"Even if you fall on your face, atleast you're moving forward"

I love the changes you made to this. It flows a lot better, and the word choice is better as well. I love it!

on Nov. 28 2012 at 2:45 pm
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace."
-Avenged Sevenfold

I adore the line ",just so you can hide the blemishes you find inside." Not only is it poetic because of the use of assonance, but the way it's said almost pokes fun at modern day girls in general. I love how this poem makes you think, while still captivating. Great job.

on Nov. 27 2012 at 3:09 pm
OneEye21 SILVER, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
I will love you no matter what you do or say. I could die anytime, not tomorrow but today.

Excellent. Really makes you think what we call beauty and what people think it is.


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