October 24, 2012
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She wakes up, knowing that pain will come,
It happens everyday. Inevitable some would say.
Her eyes are black as the midnight sun,
Her skin as fragile as a battered plum.

Each day she must drag herself to school,
Knowing of the words that will flutter down the halls.
'That girl is strange, weird, creepy,
I really hope that she doesn't speak to me.'

She ignores it all, hiding her emotion like a statue,
In class she's scared to even sneeze, 'achoo!'
These girls that call her names,
Don't understand that she's not into these games.

A heart so fragile,
A mind so broken,
A home in turmoil,
A beating father,
A drunken mum,
An older brother who is nothing more than a miserable bum.

What is this dark Angel to do?
She doesn't have me,
She doesn't have you.

Some people have to suffer all alone,
They have no one to hold onto, no one to phone.
She looks at her blinds, and something clicks in her mind,
Her own personal noose that she creates,
Now here comes her gravestone with the date.

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Shortblueeyes224 said...
Nov. 27, 2012 at 6:22 pm
I agree with jettabug some parts are abrupt...But it really is a lovely piece :)
Snowflakes replied...
Nov. 28, 2012 at 4:33 pm
Thanks a bunch :) 
OldYoungOne said...
Nov. 26, 2012 at 4:27 pm
Poets are people who give a twist to words thier own way. The main goal is to convey your meanings and you've done that. Very nice.
Snowflakes replied...
Nov. 27, 2012 at 3:56 pm
Thanks :) 
jettabugThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 10, 2012 at 2:37 pm
Great work. It's very meaningful! However, some parts are somewhat abrupt, and you need to either keep free verse the entire piece or rhyming the entire piece. Plus, your stanzas need to be consistent. Great work!
Snowflakes replied...
Nov. 11, 2012 at 12:28 pm
Thanks for the advice :) 
mystyksuniverse said...
Oct. 29, 2012 at 10:54 pm
Wow, I've been in this very position. You just about brought me to tears. Very powerful. No criticism. Congrats for being the first piece I've read on this cite that I have nothing to say about besides wow.
Snowflakes replied...
Oct. 30, 2012 at 4:42 am
Thanks a lot! :) 
Ethereal This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 29, 2012 at 2:47 pm
There's a lot of feeling in this piece, I really like how it's not quite perfect, you could tell it was sincere. 
Snowflakes replied...
Oct. 29, 2012 at 5:46 pm
Thanks a lot :). I'm pretty terrible at writing poetry, but thought I would give it a try :) 
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