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Fragility

October 24, 2012
By Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
6 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm afraid so. You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are. - Alice In Wonderland


She wakes up, knowing that pain will come,
It happens everyday. Inevitable some would say.
Her eyes are black as the midnight sun,
Her skin as fragile as a battered plum.

Each day she must drag herself to school,
Knowing of the words that will flutter down the halls.
'That girl is strange, weird, creepy,
I really hope that she doesn't speak to me.'

She ignores it all, hiding her emotion like a statue,
In class she's scared to even sneeze, 'achoo!'
These girls that call her names,
Don't understand that she's not into these games.

A heart so fragile,
A mind so broken,
A home in turmoil,
A beating father,
A drunken mum,
An older brother who is nothing more than a miserable bum.

What is this dark Angel to do?
She doesn't have me,
She doesn't have you.

Some people have to suffer all alone,
They have no one to hold onto, no one to phone.
She looks at her blinds, and something clicks in her mind,
Her own personal noose that she creates,
Now here comes her gravestone with the date.


The author's comments:
I'm not very good at writing poetry. But this is how I feel about bullying, and I just had to write this.

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on Nov. 28 2012 at 4:33 pm
Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
6 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm afraid so. You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are. - Alice In Wonderland

Thanks a bunch :) 

on Nov. 27 2012 at 6:22 pm
Shortblueeyes224 DIAMOND, Auburntown, Tennessee
57 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Are We Happy Plastic People"- Casting Crowns "While we're sung to sleep by philosophies that save the trees and kill the children" - Casting Crowns "It's such a secret place, the land of tears"Antoine de Saint-Exupery

I agree with jettabug some parts are abrupt...But it really is a lovely piece :)

on Nov. 27 2012 at 3:56 pm
Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
6 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm afraid so. You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are. - Alice In Wonderland

Thanks :) 

OldYoungOne said...
on Nov. 26 2012 at 4:27 pm
Poets are people who give a twist to words thier own way. The main goal is to convey your meanings and you've done that. Very nice.

on Nov. 11 2012 at 12:28 pm
Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
6 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm afraid so. You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are. - Alice In Wonderland

Thanks for the advice :) 

on Nov. 10 2012 at 2:37 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Great work. It's very meaningful! However, some parts are somewhat abrupt, and you need to either keep free verse the entire piece or rhyming the entire piece. Plus, your stanzas need to be consistent. Great work!

on Oct. 30 2012 at 4:42 am
Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
6 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm afraid so. You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are. - Alice In Wonderland

Thanks a lot! :) 

on Oct. 29 2012 at 10:54 pm
mystyksuniverse GOLD, Tuolumne, California
10 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I, the People, learn to remember, when I, the People, use the lessons of yesterday and no longer forget who robbed me last year, who played me for a fool--then there will be no speaker in all the world say the name: "The People," with any fleck of a sneer in his voice or any far-off smile of derision. The mob--the crowd--the mass--will arrive then. – Carl Sandburg

Wow, I've been in this very position. You just about brought me to tears. Very powerful. No criticism. Congrats for being the first piece I've read on this cite that I have nothing to say about besides wow.

on Oct. 29 2012 at 5:46 pm
Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
6 articles 0 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm afraid so. You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are. - Alice In Wonderland

Thanks a lot :). I'm pretty terrible at writing poetry, but thought I would give it a try :) 

on Oct. 29 2012 at 2:47 pm
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

There's a lot of feeling in this piece, I really like how it's not quite perfect, you could tell it was sincere.