Diamond tears

July 21, 2012
By albinotiger GOLD, Gloucester, Massachusetts
albinotiger GOLD, Gloucester, Massachusetts
13 articles 0 photos 187 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win"- Stephen King
“In life, unlike chess, the game continues after checkmate”- Isaac Asimov


Diamond tears that graze her perfect face
What has the world done to you
The sparkle the shine once in her mind
Slide down trembling lips to polluted grounds

Golden blood spills from her wrist
As her teeth clench to contain her screams
A silent world is too loud to hear her pleads
Words to actions yet nothing sets her free

Silver knifes puncture her heart
They can never touch her soul
Leaving the world behind
My ultimate treasure flies
I watch with Diamond tears
Burning in my eyes



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on Aug. 11 2012 at 9:49 pm
evalash PLATINUM, Jennings, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
love is a gamble

im really impressed ,its really good and i can relate to it keep up the good work

on Aug. 2 2012 at 5:57 pm
PurpOreos SILVER, Macomb, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Keep smiling...Because life is a beautiful thing. And there is so much to smile about!
"Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing" Benjamin Franklin

I was like this is gonna be sad but happy sad (saying that in my mind). And its not what I exepected and I like that. Nice Job!

on Aug. 1 2012 at 8:37 pm
CorianderLee BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
“Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited to all we now know and understand, while imagination embraces the entire world, and all there ever will be to know and understand.”

love it! :)

great imagery 


sumer44 GOLD said...
on Jul. 30 2012 at 10:01 am
sumer44 GOLD, Arvada, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Friends come and friends go, but a true friend sticks by you like family.

Great imagery! This was an amazing poem!

on Jul. 24 2012 at 3:06 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

You're comparing tears to diamonds and blood to gold was absolutely genius!  Amazing job:)

on Jul. 23 2012 at 9:53 am
albinotiger GOLD, Gloucester, Massachusetts
13 articles 0 photos 187 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win"- Stephen King
“In life, unlike chess, the game continues after checkmate”- Isaac Asimov

THANK YOU 4 the comment! ill try to use more imagery in my poems thanks :)

DanielM SILVER said...
on Jul. 23 2012 at 9:48 am
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
6 articles 1 photo 247 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

“If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.” – B. Reith

At first when I read this I was like okay another sad poem. Then when I go to the second stanza I was like okay this is good. My favorite line I watch with diamond tears. Such a good use of imagery. Suggestion: use more imagery cause your good at that.

on Jul. 23 2012 at 9:28 am
Thecuddlywhatsit BRONZE, Raleigh, North Carolina
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"Keep smiling, it makes people wonder what you're up to."

this is really good!

 


on Jul. 23 2012 at 9:27 am
hippiechick99 GOLD, Mesquite, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"... How dreary to be somebody-- How public like a frog;
To tell one's name; the livelong June-- To an admiring bog"
-Emily Dickinson

This is such an amazing poem. Even though me, as a reader, didn't know what was happening at times, it's very beautiful. I like the comparing her blood to gold and her tears to diamonds, I never would've thought of that. I almost cried at the end. I think you accomplished what you were going for. Good job and keep writing :)))))

on Jul. 23 2012 at 9:25 am
nakubara PLATINUM, Belvidere, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Everything you do in life is insignificant, but its important you do it anyway ~Ghandi

You amaze me, i have read alot of you r work and you are awesome! Keep it up! 


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