This is love

When you want to be with then 24/7
When you put them first
When you think of them all the time
When you go out of your way just to be next to them





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Basya44 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 6, 2012 at 6:21 pm
That is very sweet that you feel that way. Try using some literary elements...like imagery or metaphors. Try reading MY poem called PLUTO. It's about a painful kind of love. Maybe it will inspire you:) Nice job.
 
satellite23 said...
Jun. 5, 2012 at 5:55 pm

For me, this poem was too simple. Sometimes simple is good, but not in this case.

 

I should also mention that in the second line, "then" should be "them".

 
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