In the Dark About the light-colored substance

April 27, 2012
By Anonymous

I look
And
Wait
And
Hope
And
Hope
That
No one sees.
When the time is right,
I ask to go to the bathroom
And run as I take flight.
I lock myself in a stall
Slowly
And pick at the scab which has become part of me.
I see the pink grow darker still
And I wait to see my blood stop to spill
I scratched too much.
I wait and hope it stops,
But there is no such luck.
I unlock the door,
Hope the bleeding stops,
And run back quickly to my class.


The author's comments:
This is kind of a personal piece, but I felt inspired to write something about it. Please comment and give critical feedback. Thanks!

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Anni45 BRONZE said...
on May. 6 2012 at 3:28 pm
Anni45 BRONZE, Saint Paul, Minnesota
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Actually, that was it! I was pressing enter and then it was capitalizing it. It kept doing that automatically and I didn't know how to get it to stop, so I kept it like that. Thanks for commenting!

KatsK DIAMOND said...
on May. 6 2012 at 3:21 pm
KatsK DIAMOND, Saint Paul, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Being inexhaustible, life and nature are a constant stimulus for a creative mind.
~Hans Hofmann
You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you.
~Ray Bradbury

Well, I like it. I mean, I don't like that you have it, but I think it was well-written-ish. I like how it rhymes (mostly), although I feel that it would've been better if you could've finished fully with your rhyme scheme. Also, I thought that the capitalization for "I look And Wait And Hope And Hope That" was a bit tiresome. If it was just you trying to enter, and it automatically capitalizing, then just write it out in sentence form, and put // when you want to indent, and when you copy it, for the //s, remove them and indent. Overall, I really did like it though.


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