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Ideas swirl around me
Dreams press against my smooth skin
A pool of magnificent mysteries pulse above me

I gaze out the window
pressing my fingertips against the glass
the real world lies beyond me
only a few feet from where I stand

but the glass divides the dimensions
of dreams
and reality

this dream has gone on too long
slowly shifting to a nightmare
this mystery has lost its magic

as the world rushes on around me
here I float
waiting
wishing
wanting
trapped...
in a dream



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FashionThiefThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 23, 2012 at 5:59 pm:
   Loved it! I like these kinds of poems, filled with creativity and magnificent ideas!
 
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Allicat001This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 9, 2012 at 10:18 am:
Great job!  I love the abstract feel to this poem.
 
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Silver-wingedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 22, 2012 at 10:51 am:
i love the surreal point of view of this poem, it makes me think of my own dreams, i love the part, "this dreams has gone on too long slowly shifting to a nightmare."
 
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FiretipThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 8, 2012 at 7:33 pm:

Don't we all know it. Dreams are strange things. Good job :)

5/5

 
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everwoodman said...
May 21, 2012 at 7:07 pm:
Love this poem! Some of this phrasing is really great. It is well described and really takes me to a dream-like place. If I may, I would suggest a better flow in some spots. Overall, extremely well done! :)
 
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Jetsrock10210 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 18, 2012 at 6:42 pm:
I really like the surreal aspect of this poem. keep it up!
 
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EmmyCherryThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 17, 2012 at 2:14 pm:

Great poem! I especially like the line "this mystery has lost its magic". The concept of being "trapped in a dream" is also interesting, because we'd think one would be "trapped" in a nightmare and purposefully entering a dream :).

This makes me think. Actually, you can be trapped in some dreams...

 
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novemberswirl said...
May 2, 2012 at 4:52 pm:

thanks for the link to the picture!

this is really good! :)

 
EmmyCherryThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 17, 2012 at 2:15 pm :
Oh yes, thanks for the link, Liz. That was helpful visual imagery :).
 
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