Prologue

It's a little complex at first, but like "eternal_sunshine" said, when you read it a few times, it gets you. Great imagery, amazing use of adjectives, and thus, fantastic job. Keep it up man!!

I don't know why, but the imagery in this poem really speaks to me. The things I picture when I read "cancerous suns" and "cigarette buds" compliment the message perfectly.

wow this is really cool esspecially the last 3 lies i think i might quote them as a facebook status lol

Thanks everyone for the lovely comments! I really appreciate that you took the time to read my writing! :)

This is really, really nice. The last three lines are beyond perfect. I've read all of your stuff, and this is by far my favorite. It's concise, and does exactly what it needs to do. Very well done. 

Beautiful!  The imagery was phenomenal.

Oooh, I like this! It's creepy and sweet and beautiful all at the same time. You're talented. 

Wow this is beautiful. It's one of those pieces that needs to be read a few times and I think that's great. You're descriptions were unique and interesting, and I love the subtle rhymes you created. If this is a prologue I would be interested to see where it goes! Nice job :)