Prologue

March 30, 2012
By wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
6 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
Truth is beauty and beauty truth, that is all ye know on earth and all ye need to know.

Keats


A fistful of air
to the lungs
dark like cigarette buds
in spring to bloom
cancerous suns
red and hot
like the roof of my tongue
glistening
the last button
of conversation
undone.


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on Apr. 10 2012 at 10:21 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

It's a little complex at first, but like "eternal_sunshine" said, when you read it a few times, it gets you. Great imagery, amazing use of adjectives, and thus, fantastic job. Keep it up man!!

on Apr. 9 2012 at 3:58 pm
I don't know why, but the imagery in this poem really speaks to me. The things I picture when I read "cancerous suns" and "cigarette buds" compliment the message perfectly.

on Apr. 9 2012 at 1:55 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

wow this is really cool esspecially the last 3 lies i think i might quote them as a facebook status lol

on Apr. 7 2012 at 9:51 am
wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
6 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
Truth is beauty and beauty truth, that is all ye know on earth and all ye need to know.

Keats

Thanks everyone for the lovely comments! I really appreciate that you took the time to read my writing! :)

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on Apr. 7 2012 at 12:54 am
Kiyoko GOLD, Knoxville, Tennessee
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Independence is my happiness, I view things as they are without regard to place or person. My country is the world, and my religion is to do good. - Thomas Paine

This is really, really nice. The last three lines are beyond perfect. I've read all of your stuff, and this is by far my favorite. It's concise, and does exactly what it needs to do. Very well done. 

on Apr. 6 2012 at 6:37 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

Beautiful!  The imagery was phenomenal.

on Apr. 6 2012 at 4:57 pm
LadyJaneGrey PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
30 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know it defies the law of gravity, but I never studied law." - Bugs Bunny

Oooh, I like this! It's creepy and sweet and beautiful all at the same time. You're talented. 

on Apr. 6 2012 at 2:20 pm
wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
6 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
Truth is beauty and beauty truth, that is all ye know on earth and all ye need to know.

Keats

Thanks so much!

on Apr. 6 2012 at 10:51 am
eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
8 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh, and the world laughs with you;
Weep, and you weep alone.
For the sad old earth must borrow it's mirth,
But has trouble enough of its own.

Wow this is beautiful. It's one of those pieces that needs to be read a few times and I think that's great. You're descriptions were unique and interesting, and I love the subtle rhymes you created. If this is a prologue I would be interested to see where it goes! Nice job :)




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