Of her and I

March 25, 2012
By Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein


The sun is camouflaged
behind the dark gloomy clouds
I walk among the dead
with their names carved in stone

One name jumps forth
stealing my gaze
My feet start to run
toward the granite stone grave

I kneel and bow my head
I put my hands
on her tomb
my bones turning to dark emerald
positive energy surging through my body

Memories swell up inside my mind
of her and I swimming in the pond
of her and I singing in the car
of her and I sitting by the fire

Tear swell up
and shine in my eyes
they fall upon the ground
disappearing under the ground
touch the coffin far below


The author's comments:
I wrote this around the sentence: "my bones turning to dark emerald", for my creative writing class.

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Cat521 SILVER said...
on Dec. 29 2013 at 1:14 pm
Cat521 SILVER, Berwick, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"Think, before you speak. Know, before you react. Love, before you hate. There is far too much anger and hatred in the world for you to be the cause of anymore."

Real nice, especially because it comes off of a prompt. Typically that's something I (if not most people) struggle with because you have something that it has to include or it has to be about but you found a way for it to become your own. 

on Apr. 22 2012 at 6:17 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

his is a beautiful obviously written by someone who is filled with care 

and what an interesting use of "my bones turning into dark ember" its very CCC


on Apr. 20 2012 at 7:38 am
maizyiscrazy GOLD, Washington, District Of Columbia
10 articles 53 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe in pink. I believe that laughing is the best calorie burner. I believe in kissing, kissing a lot. I believe in being strong when everything seems to be going wrong. I believe in miracles. ~Audrey Hepburn

Wow! Amazing! I love your poem!

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 18 2012 at 12:00 pm
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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i agree with HoldingFast. it is a very sad poem but wonderful imagery. :) great work and keep writing XD

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:09 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1401 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Very impressive~ I can picture the poem in my mind. My favorite line was probably: "my bones turning to dark emerald..." Great work!

Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Apr. 16 2012 at 9:33 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein

Thanks, and it was basically to show the emotion of someone you lost that was very close to you

on Apr. 16 2012 at 4:04 pm
HoldingFast GOLD, Plano, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I wasn't meant to fly, I wouldn't have these wings"

this was amazing.... i dont really get how "turning to dark emerald" works with it though. it's a beautiful line n i read your little blurb so i know it was for a class but i would love to hear your thoughts on how that works? like what was the thought process for its meaning in this poem. I think its beautifully amazing though.

on Apr. 15 2012 at 7:12 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

Beautiful message with great imagery. (check out some of the fiction though) Overall good job


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