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The sun is camouflaged
behind the dark gloomy clouds
I walk among the dead
with their names carved in stone

One name jumps forth
stealing my gaze
My feet start to run
toward the granite stone grave

I kneel and bow my head
I put my hands
on her tomb
my bones turning to dark emerald
positive energy surging through my body

Memories swell up inside my mind
of her and I swimming in the pond
of her and I singing in the car
of her and I sitting by the fire

Tear swell up
and shine in my eyes
they fall upon the ground
disappearing under the ground
touch the coffin far below



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Cat521 said...
Dec. 29, 2013 at 1:14 pm:
Real nice, especially because it comes off of a prompt. Typically that's something I (if not most people) struggle with because you have something that it has to include or it has to be about but you found a way for it to become your own. 
 
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Behind_a_Plastic_Smile said...
Apr. 22, 2012 at 6:17 pm:

his is a beautiful obviously written by someone who is filled with care 

and what an interesting use of "my bones turning into dark ember" its very CCC

 
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maizyiscrazy said...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 7:38 am:
Wow! Amazing! I love your poem!
 
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beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 11:09 am:
Very impressive~ I can picture the poem in my mind. My favorite line was probably: "my bones turning to dark emerald..." Great work!
 
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HoldingFast This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 16, 2012 at 4:04 pm:
this was amazing.... i dont really get how "turning to dark emerald" works with it though. it's a beautiful line n i read your little blurb so i know it was for a class but i would love to hear your thoughts on how that works? like what was the thought process for its meaning in this poem. I think its beautifully amazing though.
 
Taconut7This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 16, 2012 at 9:33 pm :
Thanks, and it was basically to show the emotion of someone you lost that was very close to you
 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 12:00 pm :
i agree with HoldingFast. it is a very sad poem but wonderful imagery. :) great work and keep writing XD
 
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snowleopard100 said...
Apr. 15, 2012 at 7:12 pm:
Beautiful message with great imagery. (check out some of the fiction though) Overall good job
 
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