Surface Pretty

February 25, 2012
By Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
22 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow


Surface pretty-
a monster inside
her heart, her soul,
her life.
Mascara bleeding
with the tears she cries-
she smiles and laughs,
then lies.
Surface pretty-
ugly within;
her heart as black
as sin.
If they saw her soul,
they all would flinch.
They would never trust
again.

Surface pretty-
demon girl.
She chats and charms,
but kills.
Her heart racing for
the thrill...
poisoned, pretty
pill.
Surface pretty,
and sweet, and vain-
black blood runs in
her veins.
Lipstick smile hides
needle fangs.
And hate, and lust,
and pain.

Surface pretty-
empty inside.
She smiles, beguiles,
and lies.

The author's comments:
Hey hey, this my first piece ever submitted here, so please, please comment!
i think its about this feeling we all get- like you have this dark secret in your soul, and if they ever find out, your life and friendships will be utterly over.
i dunno if the verse style is too strict, or if some of the lines make sense. i trust you guys to tell me where i screwed up! :)

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on Dec. 12 2012 at 1:53 pm
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow

yup! sorry it took me soo long! you're really good! :D

on Dec. 12 2012 at 1:52 pm
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
22 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow

i just did, lol! sorry it took me SOOO long! :p

so_joy SILVER said...
on Dec. 11 2012 at 9:42 am
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

I enjoy several of them. Do you mind returning the favor and reading some of mine?

on Dec. 10 2012 at 7:33 pm
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
22 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow

im soo glad you like it!  :D

on Dec. 10 2012 at 7:32 pm
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
22 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow

THANKS for commenting! I appreciate the feedback! i guess you're right- my poems tend toward the dark side. :p

so_joy SILVER said...
on Dec. 10 2012 at 10:21 am
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 724 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

I didn't care so much for the amount of violence, but felt it was necessary to the poem. It was good, great job! Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! It would mean a lot:) Thanks!

numchuxgurl said...
on Dec. 9 2012 at 10:36 am
sad but extreamly well written *)

Diana said...
on Dec. 3 2012 at 7:20 pm
Maya this is my all time favorite!! I love it!!! Describes the female culture favored and highly marketed in American Culture. Great work.

on Oct. 4 2012 at 1:38 pm
Basya44 PLATINUM, Brighton, Massachusetts
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I really really like this. Nice work:)

on Sep. 5 2012 at 4:33 pm
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
22 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow

GENIUS??? thanks, lol :)

on Sep. 1 2012 at 6:12 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

I love it, this poem was about a topic that I haven't seen much on TI before, it's genius!  Great job and keep writing! 

on Aug. 30 2012 at 10:44 am
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
22 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow

Thanks so so much! ;) and don't worry, I will!

freefire14 said...
on Mar. 22 2012 at 12:12 am
I like this one a lot. keep writing


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