February 20, 2012
Darkness in rooms
Darkness everywhere
I’m alone forever
everywhere to hide
nowhere to find
just want someone
something to love
but darkness holds
me down does not
let me go at all never
ever so I sit in darkness
forever, alone.

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NickyJ said...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 2:07 pm
I agree with xoSamanthaxo. While the simplicity had potential for a good poem, all you really say is the same thing over and over. The only image you use is "Darkness" and its the only thing you personify.

Overall, its not interesting enough enough to the reader and its not memorable. Simplicity is fine so long as you use good figurative language, imagery, and other devices, which this poem is lacking.
xoSamanthaxo said...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 1:19 pm
the poem is a little retentive. I like thats its simple, but it needs something else besides darkness. its just not interesting enough. 
Chiko354 said...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 6:55 am
Hey, your poem is cool eventhough it's short .. like it :) 
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