That girl

January 27, 2012
By illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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Those eyes, big and blue, look into them and you'll see what I say is true.
They don’t lie nor will them every shimmer with regret, not when they look at you.
The lips, full and carmine, kiss them and the stars will shine.
Not a rude word or a mistruth will come out of them when you’re mine.
That body, curvy and mahogany, pull it close and you never be lonely.
It won't runaway or kick; you'll be its only.
That smile, lovely and white, don't be rude and you'll never fight.
It won't fade or turn into a frown not if you're around.



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illusions GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2012 at 8:44 am
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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Yes I agree. It's not my best work

on Apr. 6 2012 at 7:23 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

The point of view(objectification) was kind of hard to follow, otherwise really nice work!

on Mar. 30 2012 at 12:20 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Sweet, though I don't personally like the objectification very much. Your description is really good :) Once again, there are a few spelling errors, and a couple of sentences that seem muddled, but I'm sure you've worked it out by now :)

on Mar. 16 2012 at 2:28 pm
Devils.Angel GOLD, Drumheller, Other
12 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all good ppl die young"
"a lawful kiss is never worth a stolen one"

I love this poem and i can really feel the tension it has.

on Feb. 20 2012 at 2:07 pm
Scribbler-of-Dreams PLATINUM, Brandon, Florida
23 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love isn't everything we want, but it's everything we need....

Really great imagery...:D

on Feb. 16 2012 at 9:28 pm
PoetryAngel14 PLATINUM, Ithaca, New York
26 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Dare to be imperfect and one day there will tug at your sleeve a soulmate." ~Robert Brault
"Life is like riding a bicycle - in order to keep your balance, you must keep moving." ~Albert Einstein

good job :) it took me a little while to figure out that the speaker was talking about themself ha ha...it made it suspenseful.

on Feb. 7 2012 at 5:16 pm
m.s.moore SILVER, Waterloo, New York
6 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
life is not meant to arrive at the grave in a perfectly preserved body. it's meant to skid in side ways shouting "Holy crap what a ride."

this is probebly my favorite of yours, i loved it alot. there was definitely imagery. good job


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