That girl

January 27, 2012
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Those eyes, big and blue, look into them and you'll see what I say is true.
They don’t lie nor will them every shimmer with regret, not when they look at you.
The lips, full and carmine, kiss them and the stars will shine.
Not a rude word or a mistruth will come out of them when you’re mine.
That body, curvy and mahogany, pull it close and you never be lonely.
It won't runaway or kick; you'll be its only.
That smile, lovely and white, don't be rude and you'll never fight.
It won't fade or turn into a frown not if you're around.

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IMAdreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 7:23 pm
The point of view(objectification) was kind of hard to follow, otherwise really nice work!
illusions replied...
Apr. 11, 2012 at 8:44 am
Yes I agree. It's not my best work
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 12:20 pm
Sweet, though I don't personally like the objectification very much. Your description is really good :) Once again, there are a few spelling errors, and a couple of sentences that seem muddled, but I'm sure you've worked it out by now :)
Devils.Angel said...
Mar. 16, 2012 at 2:28 pm
I love this poem and i can really feel the tension it has.
Iamhere4u This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 2:07 pm
Really great imagery...:D
PoetryAngel14 said...
Feb. 16, 2012 at 9:28 pm
good job :) it took me a little while to figure out that the speaker was talking about themself ha made it suspenseful.
m.s.moore said...
Feb. 7, 2012 at 5:16 pm
this is probebly my favorite of yours, i loved it alot. there was definitely imagery. good job
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