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Thin Ice

Happiness was our lake
But you fell through the ice
Got a glance of misery
He looked so nice

He puts his arms around you
As I'm slowly frowning
His lips meet yours
While you're really drowning

I run out to aid you
But the ice is so thin
And with a sudden cry
It's me who's falling in

You don't even see
How I struggle for thee
With each passing breaststroke
My life's leaving me!

*You don't even see
That he'll cause you great pain,
Tear out your beautiful heart,
Just leave you insane,

If only, if only...
You'd turn back around,
Back to the arms
That kept you sound,

If only, if only..
You'd flee from that voice*
But it's too late you see?
You've made the wrong choice.



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Silver2blackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 9:20 am:
That's beautiful Recurr, I'm surprised to see that you made a rhyming poem, you said you have no interest in rhymes, This here is pretty good, Congrats to you and WrittenEmotions !
 
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HiddenAngelInTheDark said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 8:55 am:
Beautiful writing Recurring and you are right we don't realize the affect of our decides until something happens
 
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rachie-lou-whoThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 8:58 pm:
i love it! you're too talented!
 
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YandahLIBgirll said...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 6:10 pm:
I REALLY LIKE THIS!!
 
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Tbug1997 said...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 6:02 pm:
wonderful i loved it
 
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Lashonti said...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 4:23 pm:
I loved this & it reminded me of something I wen through. Your a great writer
 
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browneyedgirl1996 said...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 7:03 am:
so pretty!!
 
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thefamoustapper said...
Jan. 23, 2012 at 9:03 pm:
Woah, it's like you could read my mind, I always notice I've made the wrong choice far too late. Anyways, I love it...in a sad way...sooo sadical. Precious, keep writing!!!
 
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Wonderment said...
Jan. 23, 2012 at 8:56 pm:
Nice. This is really good. 5 stars.
 
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