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I will not wish upon a star
For when it fails its beauty falls
Nor would I want to look so far
When my pounding heart to me calls
Awakened from its lonely sleep
By the light in your splendid eyes
With which the heavens cannot keep
For they are brighter than the skies.

I shall not tap upon the wood,
Three times, or less, or even more
For this sound, I know, never could
Protect me from all things sore
As your sweet voice
For when I hear you speak
My troubles have no choice
But to be small and meek.

All my fingers I do uncross
With them I’d rather reach for you
Ill luck receives another loss
When with one glance, my dear, you slew
The bad that lives inside me
And in its place, you did leave
Shoots of love that you must see
A love story we must weave



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LunaLives said...
Nov. 30, 2012 at 9:33 pm
This is a lullaby to my heart. This is the best peice of yours I have read yet.
 
Writer_Jordan said...
Feb. 21, 2012 at 2:12 pm
Finally, a rhyming poet who can actually rhyme and fit the words naturally into the poem! It's a lovely poem and I look forward to reading more of your work!!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 21, 2012 at 2:15 pm
Wow! Thanks so much :)
 
NeVassa said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 6:30 pm
This is beautiful! keep writing!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 8:51 pm
Thank you!
 
babyrex4 said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 4:14 pm
Wow this poem was really nice! It really flowed very nicely together. Most poems make my eyes roll all over the page but not this one. I'd give it a 6/5 but since that is impossible, it will be a 5/5. If you don't mind, could you check out some of my poems? I'd really appreciate it from a great poet like you :)!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 5:08 pm
Wow!! Thank you so much, I'm glad you think so! And I definitely will, asap.
 
JaneCapelleThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 11, 2012 at 2:25 pm
Nice poem!! I like the idea =)
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 2:46 pm
Thanks a lot!
 
Donahue8 said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 7:21 pm
wow!! really great! I likes the way it was laid out too! I don't really have any critiques
 
. replied...
Feb. 7, 2012 at 5:08 pm
Thank you!
 
AirRaeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 5:59 pm
I like it. very controversial. Nice.
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 5:59 pm
Thank you!
 
Skieler said...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:17 pm
its really nice
 
Bluewaterfall replied...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:22 pm
T h a n k s !
 
White_Trash843 said...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:17 pm
this is a great poem and has much rhyme great job!!! 5/5
 
Bluewaterfall replied...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:21 pm
Thank you!!!
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark said...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:14 pm
You're writing is really beautiful Blue
 
Bluewaterfall replied...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:16 pm
Thank you! Glad you think so!
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark replied...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:17 pm
No problem and welcome
 
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