A Pink Watch, Portal, and Perpetual Sea

January 6, 2012
By Ella1 GOLD,
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments

A pessimist would call it fate
a believer would fight it
but no twist on philosophy undermines reality

it hurts,
it really hurts.

I caught his eye's glimmer
for the last time
before he disappeared through the portal,
the portal that takes real life people away
and converts their existence in entirety
into a barrage of texts and memories.

He makes his way through,
as he continues to walk
I see myself unraveling from the inside out
I had forgotten to let go.

My eyes set sail on a long journey
through a sea of burning waters.

Tonic tears try to tear their way out,
I fight them.
They won't escape,
no please, don't let them escape...

Tears are unrelenting creatures,
if they can't find a way out
they will consume you.

After the waves settled,
they pool at heart of vulnerability,
where the pressure of the ocean is a constant reminder
of what is gone.

He left me with but memories,

and a pink watch
which haunts my dreams,
its diabolical laughter silently ticks away
the seconds remaining of eternity
in which my heart will
forever float in a sea.
A sea of un-shed tears.


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AVERAGE BRONZE said...
on Feb. 21 2012 at 11:20 am
AVERAGE BRONZE, Rosehill, Virginia
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yes please i just posted something a few days ago ..u should check it out! :)

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Feb. 16 2012 at 2:31 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Thanks so much :) Is there anything of yours you would like me to read?

AVERAGE BRONZE said...
on Feb. 15 2012 at 10:18 am
AVERAGE BRONZE, Rosehill, Virginia
3 articles 0 photos 48 comments
i love your metaphors and its very detailed. i like the vision. . . excellent. i'm jealous :)

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 11:06 am
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Thank you for reading! I appreciate your comments :)

Shmelmo GOLD said...
on Feb. 1 2012 at 5:50 pm
Shmelmo GOLD, Elma, Iowa
16 articles 9 photos 143 comments

Favorite Quote:
You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.

Thanks for your comment on my poem. I would have to agree that your ideas were a little out of order - but that is exactly how emotions work. Nicely done!

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 31 2012 at 3:25 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Of course I will, just let me know but I will keep checking. Thanks for reading!

on Jan. 31 2012 at 2:48 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

I adore this! 5/5! (: be sure to check out Inside The Mirror and Glitter Rain when they get published, would you?

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 30 2012 at 6:55 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Thanks for your feedback and I guess the end could stand on its own, never thought of that :)

on Jan. 30 2012 at 12:09 am
Pamplemousse SILVER, Gilbert, Arizona
7 articles 1 photo 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be happy, Don't do whatever you like, Like whatever you do" -James Barrie (author of Peter Pan)

Really Powerful poem! The ideas were a little all over the place, but emotional things are just like that. The end when you talk about tears and the watch is the best part I think and could even just be by itself. Great job!

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2012 at 11:39 am
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Yeah sure thanks for reading!

on Jan. 27 2012 at 3:07 pm
chloena_garrett GOLD, Colorado City, Texas
19 articles 13 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet.

Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep.

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.

Art is the only way to run away without leaving home.

I really like this and I like the wording and way you described the ticking haunting you reminding you that he's disappeared. Can you check out my poem Love Is Written, comment and rate?

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 12:06 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
I commented on your song again. I think it is good and you shouldn't be putting yourself down so much. If you want to succeed you have to have the right attitude. You are good at writing lyrics.

XCBVIA GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 11:48 am
XCBVIA GOLD, Delaware, Ohio
14 articles 1 photo 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
NGU. Never give up.

Ella, on my rap Missing, yes, I was trying to get the Eminem feel into it, because I like his raps. I jusst wanted you to go to my song Go Away and answer this question in a comment- tell me if this is a good song so far? I wish, I could sing, I wish, I could rap, I wish, I could do anything, but I can't, do any of that, I've always been secondhand, second best, half as good as the others, worse than the rest, I feel like I don't fit in, and yeah I may be putting myself down, but I feel, I should do that now, Is it good so far?

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 3:12 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Hey, thanks for reading and sure I will read your rap!

XCBVIA GOLD said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 1:18 pm
XCBVIA GOLD, Delaware, Ohio
14 articles 1 photo 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
NGU. Never give up.

Ella, you read and commented on my song Go Away ( supposed to be Go Away, but Stay ), and I thought about what you said, about reading this poem, and I think it is very good! You can tell it's from the heart, and I can kind of see Shakespeare type of writing in it, and I love the way you described the tears, as unrelelnting creatures! I've never heard that before, and I think this whole poem is good! By the way, if you get time, can you read my rap skit called Missing? But anyways, great! Love it! Keep writing! :D

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 22 2012 at 1:07 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Of course I will! I love Shakespeare and I'm sure it will be great!

on Jan. 21 2012 at 11:43 pm
callie15 BRONZE, North Plains, Oregon
3 articles 21 photos 424 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I dreamed I was a butterfly, flitting around in the sky; then I awoke. Now I wonder: Am I a man who dreamt of being a butterfly, or am I a butterfly dreaming that I am a man?"
-Chuang Tzu

"No man with a good car needs to be justified!"
-Wise Blood

Yeah, could you read my poem "Mother Phoebe"? It's kind of confusing (it uses Shakesperian words), but I think the message is clear. Anyways, I think you might enjoy it :)

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 21 2012 at 11:10 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Thanks :) If there is anything of yours you want me to read let me know :)

on Jan. 21 2012 at 6:18 pm
callie15 BRONZE, North Plains, Oregon
3 articles 21 photos 424 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I dreamed I was a butterfly, flitting around in the sky; then I awoke. Now I wonder: Am I a man who dreamt of being a butterfly, or am I a butterfly dreaming that I am a man?"
-Chuang Tzu

"No man with a good car needs to be justified!"
-Wise Blood

Oh heck, you didn't need me to look at it! I agree with everyone here, this poem is amazing. It has a lot of emotion and it's unique. I love how you described the tears :)

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 4:59 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
Thank you :)


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