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Reaching for Breath

January 2, 2012
By WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...


Drowning in a sea of familiarity,
I touch the face of the One I've ignored for too long...
Beauty creeping into my searching eyes,
Broken,
Falling,
And seeking an answer...
When will hate burn?
Don't pretend you aren't in pain...
So many lies robbing you of passion,
Won't you stand?
Fight for all the lost innocence?
So sick,
Defenseless...
Flames dance brightly,
A seduction unknown...
Your heart lost in a fantasy,
Such make-believe intimacy,
Didn't you realize the lie all along?
Begging for one last night,
Loving every softly whispered deception...
Enough!
Forgotten words wait to steal all of you,
Breathing lust slowly down your neck,
Hidden behind beautiful features...
Intoxication so deadly...
Escape out of grasp,
Night becomes your Lover...
Impossible to resist,
In love,
Reaching for Breath...
And gone. ~


The author's comments:
This is really up to interpretation. I don't really know what I was thinking when I wrote it. But I hope it connects with you all in a certain way as it has me.

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on Apr. 21 2012 at 2:32 am
SweetSandyFlower GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Not everyone has to go to college because ..hello!.. PIZZAS DONT DELIVER THEMSELVES!!!!

This one is so true and relatable. I love the way you always draw me into the poems with your use of words and emotion.

on Apr. 5 2012 at 10:43 pm
TheGirlWhoReachesForStars SILVER, Morrisville, North Carolina
6 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Imperfection is beauty; madness is genius.
and its better to be absolutely ridiculous
than absolutely boring.\"
-Marilyn Monroe

I can relate to basically all of your poems, and they're JUST. SO. GOOD.  This one is no exception! you're amazing dear ;) haha

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on Mar. 21 2012 at 6:27 pm
deleted, Miami, Florida
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 I like it :) really pretty wording :)

on Mar. 13 2012 at 8:13 pm
Moon_In_A_Cup BRONZE, West End, North Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments
This is really well-written. the emotions are clear and its powerful :)

on Mar. 12 2012 at 2:05 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

You were correct! ^^

on Mar. 10 2012 at 12:06 pm
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

It kind of reminds me of the guy that will tell a girl what he thinks she wants to hear so he can get what he wants. But the girl is smarter than that, and she sees through his fake claims of love. I don't that's just my interpretation of it. Right or wrong, I love it!

on Mar. 9 2012 at 7:55 pm
bloodroselove SILVER, Spring Mills, Pennsylvania
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ok so i lied this is my new favorite one it gave me chills. love it!

on Mar. 8 2012 at 2:32 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you ^^

on Mar. 8 2012 at 2:31 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you, ^^ You know you responded twice, right? xD

 


on Feb. 4 2012 at 8:45 am
EthanCalhoun PLATINUM, Fairview, New Jersey
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again and again, all ur poems are great

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on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:42 pm
Rachielol, Bradenton, Florida
0 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
I dance like I live life, full out.

Dance like there's nobody watching,
Love like you'll never be hurt.
Sing like there's nobody listening,
And live like it's heaven on earth.

This is really great. Instead of repeating "begging" in your pieces, try yearning, beckoning or pleading. Some of your descriptive words chould be exchanged but your metaphors are fantastic!

on Jan. 31 2012 at 8:26 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
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I like the suttle strength in this one. Its a very kickass poem just in a suttle way. I can senes the anger in the tone. Its good stuff. again, 5/5 stars.

on Jan. 31 2012 at 1:37 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

XD I wish you did know! lol! and yes, it is very mysterious... This is the only poem I think that I can't really describe even to myself.

on Jan. 30 2012 at 3:11 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

This poem is very.. mysterious o.O and i have to say, your poems just have this voice to them that...idk how to describe it...the poems arent quite my style, but their tone is just...just...ah! cant think of what its like lol! I guess all i can say is 5/5! :)

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:09 pm
chloena_garrett GOLD, Colorado City, Texas
19 articles 13 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet.

Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep.

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.

Art is the only way to run away without leaving home.

I LOVE THIS. great job beautiful! ur anamazing poet! :D 5/5

on Jan. 25 2012 at 9:11 pm
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
4 articles 2 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

Good work i thought it was very well written!

on Jan. 25 2012 at 6:36 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

You gotta have something! XD

on Jan. 25 2012 at 6:34 pm
Silverleaf SILVER, North Vernon, Indiana
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wow, i just have no words for this :)

on Jan. 22 2012 at 6:23 pm
chloena_garrett GOLD, Colorado City, Texas
19 articles 13 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet.

Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep.

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.

Art is the only way to run away without leaving home.

WRITTEN!!! I LOVE THIS!!!! it seems a bit like something recurring would write. lol

on Jan. 19 2012 at 6:40 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thanks! I don't know why people like it so much lol


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